Englisch Hausaufgabe Written Discussion Verbesserungsvorschläge?

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There are some arguments for and against rationing the usage of cars per person per year.

First, people would have to use busses (= AE; BE = buses) or trains more ofthen (RS) in small cities that would cause full busses (s. o.) and trains, because they do not
have enoughZeit busses (s. o.) everywhere. People have (Zeit) to find a bus or train that comes to (Präposition) the rigth (RS) time to the rigth (RS) place (Word Order).

Second. In Germany, we have to pay (---) our ecar taxes (Wort) very year (Komma) or we aren't allowed to use it (Wen / was?). If we can only use it  (Wen / was?) a bit (Ausdruck), it (Wer / was?) would get much too expensive for that (Wofür?).

Another argument against  (Hier fehlt etwas.) is (kein Komma) that people who have to earn money by driving cars (kein Komma) will get problems. For example (Komma) how could a taxi driver earn enough money for food (kein Komma) if he (Pronomen; was ist mit Frauen?) is not allowed to drive a car as ofthen  (RS) as he wants to?

A good argument for rationing the usage of cars is (kein Komma; hier fehlt etwas) it would reduce the bad pollution  (Formulierung) from (---) cars  (kein Komma) because they aren't used every day.

Another good argument for rationing the usage of cars is  (kein Komma; hier fehlt etwas) we would have  (Formulierung) less traffic. That means that the people who are driving (Zeit) at (Präposition) that day can drive faster and there are no traffic jams anymore.

The last argument for (Wen / was?) is (kein Komma; hier fehlt etwas) the rushhour would not cause  (Hier fehlt etwas.) traffic jams when more people go (Zeit) by bus or train, so (Hier fehlt etwas.)  everyone comes (Zeit) punktual  (RS; Wortart) for (Präposition) work and can (Zeit) sleep longer (Ausdruck, kein Komma) because they are (Zeit) faster.

On the one hand (Komma) busses (s.o.) and trains might be full, but you can (Zeit) also ride your bike, so  (Hier fehlt etwas.) you will get (Zeit) no problems.

As conclusion (Komma) I would say (kein Komma) the arguments for rationing the usage of cars are better than the arguments against, but there have (Zeit) to be special laws for people who earn their money by driving, like taxi drivers.

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Könnte jemand bitte meine Englisch Argumentation korrektur lesen?

Asbos

In Britain, children and teenagers can be given an ASBO if they do anything that is an antisocial behavior. It’s a way of punishing them for their actions instead of going to prison or similar punishments. An ASBO consists of several punishments like being forbidden to go to different areas of a town or to meet specific people.

The problem with ASBO’s is that they can give the person depression because they are socially isolated. Consequently, this can lead to self harm or depression in the worst cases. Secondly, their actions aren’t primarily punished they are prevented so that the child/teen won’t do it anymore. Furthermore, the things that are reported aren’t necessarily illegal sometimes it’s just something that might be annoying to others, like tattoos. Having said that, this might just be a way of showing personality. Reportedly, it has happened that someone was just given an ASBO because he looked scary and was always wearing a hood. Another thing to add is that the pictures that are hung up around town can be really embarrassing and can lead to harassment by others. On the other hand, ASBOS also have advantages. Many teenagers have their problems with school, friends etc. This might lead to some illegal actions like drinking or smoking. In addition to that, there often is some kind of group pressure. ASBO’s are a way of showing them that their actions are wrong and that there is a solution to their problems. For instance, it’s a way of identifying that their actions have been wrong. Another key thing to remember is that ASBO’s can keep the children/teenagers from going to prison and that would be way worse.

All things considered, I think that ASBO’s can be good for the young people to change their antisocial behavior. That way, they can understand that their actions have been wrong and change them for good.

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