Englisch Hausaufgabe Written Discussion Verbesserungsvorschläge?

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There are some arguments for and against rationing the usage of cars per person per year.

First, people would have to use busses (= AE; BE = buses) or trains more ofthen (RS) in small cities that would cause full busses (s. o.) and trains, because they do not
have enoughZeit busses (s. o.) everywhere. People have (Zeit) to find a bus or train that comes to (Präposition) the rigth (RS) time to the rigth (RS) place (Word Order).

Second. In Germany, we have to pay (---) our ecar taxes (Wort) very year (Komma) or we aren't allowed to use it (Wen / was?). If we can only use it  (Wen / was?) a bit (Ausdruck), it (Wer / was?) would get much too expensive for that (Wofür?).

Another argument against  (Hier fehlt etwas.) is (kein Komma) that people who have to earn money by driving cars (kein Komma) will get problems. For example (Komma) how could a taxi driver earn enough money for food (kein Komma) if he (Pronomen; was ist mit Frauen?) is not allowed to drive a car as ofthen  (RS) as he wants to?

A good argument for rationing the usage of cars is (kein Komma; hier fehlt etwas) it would reduce the bad pollution  (Formulierung) from (---) cars  (kein Komma) because they aren't used every day.

Another good argument for rationing the usage of cars is  (kein Komma; hier fehlt etwas) we would have  (Formulierung) less traffic. That means that the people who are driving (Zeit) at (Präposition) that day can drive faster and there are no traffic jams anymore.

The last argument for (Wen / was?) is (kein Komma; hier fehlt etwas) the rushhour would not cause  (Hier fehlt etwas.) traffic jams when more people go (Zeit) by bus or train, so (Hier fehlt etwas.)  everyone comes (Zeit) punktual  (RS; Wortart) for (Präposition) work and can (Zeit) sleep longer (Ausdruck, kein Komma) because they are (Zeit) faster.

On the one hand (Komma) busses (s.o.) and trains might be full, but you can (Zeit) also ride your bike, so  (Hier fehlt etwas.) you will get (Zeit) no problems.

As conclusion (Komma) I would say (kein Komma) the arguments for rationing the usage of cars are better than the arguments against, but there have (Zeit) to be special laws for people who earn their money by driving, like taxi drivers.

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Kann mir jemand Englisch Sätze verbessern?

In former times everyone lived near their home due to the bad (besseres Wort?) transport.

Cars changed that completely! Since their invention people have been able to pursue their dreamjob, even if it is further away, and explore new places. Consequently, people's minds broaden and they get the chance to have exciting experiences.

One has not to ride a horse our walk for hours so as to get somewhere.

Nobody can deny that cars were revolutionary since travelling became much easier and people are able to make a better use of time.

Some people say the world would be a better place (bessere Formuliernung?) because of their greenhaus gas emission

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Hallo kann jemand folgenden Text korrigieren? Dankeschön Dear Ben Russell, I read your article “Credit cards to ration individuals' carbon use“, which is published in newspaper The Independent in July19,2006. First of all I want to say that I think it's very good that there are people like you who think about the environment and of course about the problems which are exist. The suggestion is that every body has a credit-card with Carbon Dioxide points and if someone travels, use electricity, gas or petrol with carbon rations they have to pay. There is a special amount of this points and if you need more than your personal cap you have to buy credits on the open market. On the other side if there are people who cut the pollution of the carbon they produce, they could sell their surplus. Mr Miliband also suggests that banning products like light bulbs or electrical appliances which waste power while on standby, have to forbid. Everyone have to make automatic payments of offset pollution. I think this credit cards are not a good idea, because there would be a discrimination, because on the one hand rich people wouldn't cut their consume because they have the money to buy this credits. The most of them wouldn't take care about the environment. On the other hand the poor people have to take care about their carbon use. They haven't got the money to buy new credits. The result would be that the poor people take care and the richer people don't take care. Now you can say that it's maybe not a completely good result but now there are a few people who take care. Better than no one. But what is if the poorer people have to use the car everyday because they have to drive to work. They have to pay that they are working. This wouldn't make work more attractive. The poorer people are disadvantaged. Another cause why this credit cards are not a good idea is that you can't control it. There would be a lot of situations where are disagreements. For example if people drive together to work. Now who have to pay with carbon for that? The driver or the other ones? Another fact is that you can't handle everything with money. Everyone has to pay that the environment become better. But money doesn't help. You can't stop the global warming with money. My idea is that there have to be recompenses for those people who do something against the environment problems. There have to be individual things, which make environment protection very attractive and also necessary. It's very important that everybody knows about the problems and the results if we go on like this. All in all I think it's very good that there are people who think about a solution and things that can be do to stop the global warming. Nevertheless I think the credit-cards and money wouldn't be a good solution

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