Englisch Berichtigung 11.September

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Vom Fragesteller als hilfreich ausgezeichnet

Hier eine korrigierte Fassung:

I want to tell about the September 11th, 2001, the day which has changed the world Four terror attacks were carried out against important buildings in the U.S.A. It began at Portland airport in the morning of September 11th.. Mohammed Atta bought a ticket to Boston and met three other men at the airport. In Boston he climbed into the American Airlines** plane** to Los Angeles. Mohammed Atta hijacked the machine, and brought it into his power. The police was informed less than 20 minutes laterThe 11th September 2001 I think if I say the three magic words World Trade Center everybody knows what it means! At 8.46 o’clock the first airplane flew into the 417 m high North Tower of the World Trade Center. Hundreds of people died. At first many people thought it was an accident. Worldwide TV channels reported live about the supposed accident in New York. At 9.03 a second plane flew into the South Tower of the WTC. A huge fireball shot out of the building at the opposite side. A large fire broke out. [---]People tried to escape from the buildings, some people jumped out of the windows to commit suicide rather than being burnt alive.. Thousands of humans all over the world watched this scenario. At this time it was clear that these ”accidents” were targeted attacks. The planes flew into the WTC at a very busy time. [---] President George W. Bush heared about this attack during a school visit to Sarasota, Florida. Later he remarked, ** "Today** we are witness of a national tragedy ... It is apparently a terrorist attack on our country” [---] It was [---] hell for thousands of helpers. But 87% of the people who were in the building could be saved. At 9.37Uhr the attacks were not over yet, another plane flew into the Pentagon in Washington D.C.. All 64 passengers on the machine were killed. The government [---[---] closed the whole airspace. All machines had to ** be **guided to the nearest airport where they landed in order to be controlled. Perhaps the White House would be the next target? In case of it it was evacuated. The last machine flew across Pennsylvania with the destination Washington DC. The passengers, being informed by cell phones about the events in N.Y and Washington, were able to overpower the hijackers. The plane crashed into an open field near Pittsburgh. All 44 people on board paid their courageto prevent something worse, with their lives. The 415 meter high South Tower collapsed in just 10 seconds, the North Tower just half an hour later. The collapse destroyed many buildings around including a German bank. At 17.20 clock the building WTC 7 broke down The sad outcome of these attacks: 3,000 people were killed and 6000 were wounded. More than 3200 children lost their parents on this day. The U.S. was in a state of shock. For the first time since 1776 (since the War of Independence), the United States were attacked by an enemy in their own country.

Mein Lieber, für den 2.Teil suche dir einen anderen Dummen … oder lerne erst mal richtig Englisch.

OMG - so ein langer Text und so viele Fehler!

The 11th September 2001 I think if I say the three magic words World Trade Center everybody knows what it means! Artikel, Satzstellung; Tense, if-clause I want to tell about the 11th September 2001.The day the world has changed. Four terror attacks were carried out on important buildings in the U.S.A. It has begun at the airport in Portland in the morning of 11 September. Mohammed Atta bought a ticket to Boston and met three other men at the airport. In Boston he climbed into the plane of American Airlines to Los Angeles. Mohammed Atta hijacked the machineand bringed them into his power. The police was informed less than 20 minutes later At 8.46 Clock the first airplane flied in the 417 m high north tower of the World Trade Center. Hundreds of people died. At first many people thought it was an accident. Worldwide TV channels reported live about the supposedly accident in New York. At 9.03 a second plane flied into the South Tower of the WTC. A huge fireball shot on the opposite side of the building. A large fire brought out. The people escaped from the buildings, some People jumped out of the window to save. Thousands of humans all over the world look at these scenario. At this time it was clear that these are targeted attacks. At a time in which the WTC was full the plane flies into it. --- President George W. Bush heared about this attack during a school visit to Sarasota. Later he remarks: "Today we are witness a national tragedy ... It is apparently a terrorist attack on our country." Many volunteers are spilled during their evacuation. It was a hell for thousands of helpers. But 87% of the people who were at the building could be saved. At 9.37--- the attack is not over yet, another Plane flies in to the Pentagon. All 64 passengers on the machine are killed. The government could close the whole airspace. All machines must be controlled to the nearest airport and land. Perhaps is the white house the next target? To make sure was it evacuated. The last machine is flying over Pennsylvania at the rate Washington DC. It can happen, however passengers to overpower the hijackers. The plane crashed in an open field near Pittsburgh. 44 people on board**, the courage to try to prevent something worse, pay with their lives**. The 415 meter high south tower collapses in just 10 seconds. The north tower just half an hour later. It was the collapse destroyed much in the near including a German bank. At 17.20 ---- the building WTC 7 brok-down The sad outcome of these attacks: 3,000 people killed and 6000 are hurt. More than 3200 children lose their parents on this day. The U.S. is in a state of shock. For the first time since 1814 (since the struggles for independence), These were the first attack in their own country.

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Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen. Für Korrekturen fehlt mir die Zeit.

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English Summary and short story: "The Fun They Had"

Any mistakes? Any Verbesserungsvorschläge? P.s. Ist der Text nicht zu lang für eine Summary? Der orginal Text hat ca. 1042 Wörter.

The short story ‘The fun they had‘, written by Isaac Asimov deals with a boy and a girl, Tommy and Margie, who find out something about school in the past. On the 17th of March 2155 Tommy, a thirteen-year-old boy, finds a ‘real book‘ which has been printed on paper. He is at the house of Margie, an eleven-year-old girl. They both take a look at it togehter. The book is really old and the pages are yellow and crinky. In the year 2155 this kind of books do not exist anymore. In this time words are moving on a television screen. These televisions can contain over a million of boks. That is the reason, why Tommy thinks that they are much better. He has found the old book in the attic of his house. While reading, Tommy says that it is about school. Margie hates school and cannot understand why someone would write about it. She was having problems with learning geography from her ‘mechanical teacher‘. It was black, large and had a screen on it. It teaches the students, gives them exercises and askes them questions, all in a special room in their own house. It can also calculate the marks in no time. Margie hates the slot where she has to insert her homework or test papers. Once the geopraphy sector of her mechanical teacher was geraded too quick, so that her marks got worse and worse. The County Inspector rebuilt it after one hour. He was really nice to Margie. She hopped that her mechanical teacher would be taken away for a longer time, like Tommy’s was, because it’s history sector blanked out completly. Tommy says that the book which he has found, is not about their type of school, it is about school centuires ago. They find out that students back then had a man as a teacher who taught the girls and boys, gave them homework and asked them questions. They had a special building, all the children went to. And they learned the same things, if they were the same age. First Margie does not understand how a person could be a teacher and how the students were thaught the same thing, because her mother says that the education must fit to each child's mind, but nevertheless in her opinion these schools are funny and she wants to read more about it. Then it is time for Margie and Tommy for their school. Margie goes into the schoolroom in her house where the mechanical teacher stands. It is already on, because the lessons are always at regular hours. She was thinking about the old school system and how much fun the children must had, learning and spending time togehter.

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Hallo könnte wer mein englisch Referat kontrollieren?

What is factory farming ?. Factory Farming is a way of producing meat and other animal products quickly and cheaply. The animals are kept in small cages. They get special food, so they are growing faster. The main products of this industry are meat, milk and eggs for human consumption. Advantages: Cheaper prices With the use of factory farms, the prices of food became very cheap. The main reason for this is that the food can be processed very fast. Also, the food for the animals is very cheap, because they buy it in mass orders. Enough animal products for the market Factory farms use vitamins, minerals, and other substances that make animals grow faster and so they can produce much more food. Big farms also have modern tools which helps to produce meat, milk, eggs and other products very quickly and in an efficient way.

Disadvantages: Very bad living conditions In many factory farms the animals are kept in small cages, where they don’t have any space to walk around and do what they naturally do. The animals are usually kept indoor, so they don’t get any fresh air or sun. The cages are not cleaned as often as it is necessary, so the living conditions for the animals are very bad.

Bad for people’s health Factory farms are bad for people’s health in two ways. One of these is the pollution what they produce, which harm the health of the people who are living next to them. The other way is through the antibiotics that they give their animals to make them immune against illnesses. These can be transmitted to people from the meat and other animal products.

Small farming businesses haven’t a chance against factory farms Many factory farms are owned by corporations, who have the possibility to buy modern tools, equipment and larger spaces for the animals. They’re able to sell their products at a lower price. Smaller farms usually don’t have the resources to buy faster and bigger machines and therefore they can’t compete with their larger rivals.

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Written discussion

Hallo wir haben als hausaufgabe aufbekommen eine written discussion zu schreiben. Ich hab mal eine geschrieben könntet ihr den mal durchlesen und meine fehler korrigieren oder verbesserungen vorschlagen?

Thema:Mobile phones have become an important part of our lives.More than 90% of german teenagers have a mobile phone of their own.What are the advantages and disadvantages of using mobile phones?

Mobile phones have become an important part of our lives. More than 90 % of German teenagers have a mobile phone. But is a mobile phone really important? Here are advantages and disadvantages of using mobile phones.

My first argument against mobile phones is that the most teenagers use a mobile phone in the lesson. They play games and send emails or short messages to someone. So they are they are distracted from the lesson and get bad marks.

The next point is, that some people can’t stop using mobile phones. They get addicted.They lose their social contacts and spend all their time on their mobile phones.A good example is my friends brother, he haven’t got social contacts he is all the time write short messages or calls to friends.

The last point is that mobile phones are unhealthy. I have heard in many television reports that mobile phones can be cause of cancer.

On the other hand there are arguments for the using of mobile phones too.

Firstly you are very flexible. You can use it everywhere at any time.For example you are waiting for the next train and you are bored, you can use your mobile phone. You can listen to music,play games or go online when you have an Internet flat. More Important is that the mobile phone is helpful in case of emergency.If something happen on the way to school or somewhere else you can call to the emergency.

The most important is that you are always be in contact with your friends and your family. So your parents mustn’t care where you are. With one call they can know it.

After looking at both sides I’m in the opinion that mobile phones are important for the most people.

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englisch referat canada wichtig!

Bitte übersetzt mir das richtig mit grammatik und so. Hier ist der Text:

Canada****

Well, the topic of my presentation is Canada. First of all I’ll tell you briefly what I’m going to talk about:

  1. general things about Canada
  2. the capital Ottawa
  3. national parks
  4. holidays

  5. In 1541 the first European colonised Canada. Before that, only Inuit and Eskimos lived there. Now Canada has got only 32.378.200 inhabitants although it is with 9.984.670 km² the second biggest state in the world. It is cut into 13 provinces and territories, which have all their own capitals. Everywhere in Canada you pay with the Canadian Dollar. One Euro is equivalent to about 1Dollar 50. Queen Elizabeth II is shown on the twenty Dollar bill. The most known sights are the “Niagara falls“ which are visited by most of the tourists. One half lies in the province Ontario in Canada, and the other half is in the federal state New York in America. Well, the flag. It is called Maple Leaf Flag, because on it you see a red maple leaf. The two red stripes symbolize the Atlantic and the Pacific Ocean, the two oceans which surround Canada. The colour white represents the arctic fields of snow in the north and the maple-leaf is typical to visualize the great forests of the country. The colour red is to remind people of the murdered soldiers in World War I. The two languages, which are spoken in Canada, are English and French that is because the population consists of 40% English-speaking people, 27% French and 20% other Europeans. And although the Eskimos and the Inuit were the first inhabitants they amount only 1, 5 % of the population.

  6. Ottawa There are the parliament buildings where Canada’s government resides. Ottawa has got 860.000 inhabitants, it’s the fourth largest city and it is the only town which is officially bilingual. (French and English) It is located in the province Ontario.

  7. National parks There are about 40 national parks in Canada. The Wood Buffalo National park is with 44.800 km² the largest one and I’m going to tell you something about it. The park was established in 1922 to protect the world's largest herd of free roaming Wood Bison. The Wood Buffalo National Park contains a large variety of wildlife species, such as black bear, wolf, beaver and white pelican. It contains one of the world's largest fresh water deltas.

  8. Holidays Now I’ll tell you something about the bank holidays. There are many holiday which are the same as in Germany, like New Years Day, Good Friday, Easter Monday and Christmas. But there are some, which can not be found in Germany, for example the Victoria Day. On that day, you honour the acting British monarchs. Or the Canada Day on July 1 where you celebrate the independence of Canada. On that day many flags, fireworks and parades can be seen.

Thats it. Thank you for your attention and I hope you have enjoyed it.

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Könnte sich jemand den Aufsatz auf Englisch durchlesen (Teil 1)?

“Man kann nicht nicht kommunizieren” is one of the five axioms from the Austrian communication scientist Paul Watzlawick. The meaning of the axiom is that it is not possible not to communicate. But not only people from the same country with the same language, with the same culture and the same religion have to communicate. There are a lot of different behaviors, habits and thoughts which make communication difficult. For this essay about intercultural communication I used the video from Ted Talks with the title “What do you think when you look at me” from Dalia Mogahed. She talks about the prejudices against Muslims, the problems she had after the terrorist attacks from the 11th September and how people from different cultures declare their solidarity with Muslims. We live in a globalized world where we need to communicate with all kind of different cultures. Our neighbors are from Turkey, Russia, Spain, to sum up from all over the world. We live and work with them and that’s the reason why it is so important to communicate with them. But what is intercultural communication? It describes the verbal and nonverbal interaction between people from different cultures. At first view, it sounds very easy, but it is not just to overcome the language barrier, it is even more. The talk of Dalia Mogahed is about the prejudices against Muslims, the courage to maintain to her religion and also to overcome prejudices. She is a woman who has decided to be a Muslim, and she had the courage to out herself as one in front of her feminist friends. Dalia tells that they had prejudices against her new religion, and they claimed that she is oppressing herself. After the 11th of September 2001, she was afraid to be a Muslim for the first time and afraid to visit a mosque. Attacks on mosques and against people who are Muslims or who were perceived to be Muslims happened. But although these things happened, she has decided to visit the mosque. And in this mosque, were people from all kind of faith and also people with no faith who stand in solidarity together with the Muslims in their congregation. If somebody would ask me which ideas from the video are very important for me, I would choose the following ones. Firstly, the fact that people are afraid of Muslims because of terror attacks which are motivated by the religion is comprehensible. But it is wrong to say that every single Muslim is a terrorist. These are prejudices which exist because the people don´t catch up on different cultures or religions like the Islam. They think, they know what is written in the Quran, but the most of them don´t. Their opinion is influenced by media and other peoples. These aspects together are the reason for these prejudices. This is also one of the most important idea in the talk.

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