Frage von Vegeta27, 44

Wie findet ihr das, bitte Verbesserungsvorschläge?

Meine Nachrichten für den Englischunterricht

My first new is over the super tuesday in America. The Super Tuesday in the 2016 presidential election was held on March 1 in 12 states.

The Democratic primaries and caucuses concluded with Bernie Sanders winning Colorado, Minnesota, Oklahoma, and Vermont; and Hillary Clinton winning Alabama, Arkansas, Georgia, Massachusetts, Tennessee, Texas, and Virginia. Clinton received 486 delegates, while Sanders received 321. The Republican primaries and caucuses concluded with Donald Trump winning Alabama, Arkansas, Georgia, Massachusetts, Tennessee, Vermont, and Virginia; Ted Cruz winning Alaska, Oklahoma, and Texas; and Marco Rubio winning Minnesota. John Kasich and Ben Carson were also in the election, but neither won any states.

My second news is from England. A British man was removed from a plane by armed police at Luton airport after a fellow passenger read a message on his mobile phone about “prayer” and reported him as a security threat. Laolu Opebiyi, 40, from London, said he was forced to hand over his phone and supply his password in order to establish his innocence after he tried to arrange a conference call prayer with friends using WhatsApp.

My last news is the new lamborgihni Centenario Unveiled this week at the Geneva motor show, the Centenario exists as a celebration of the 100th anniversary of Ferruccio's birth. And despite its abject outlandishness, this is no token gesture: the Centenario is a full-on production model, albeit one destined for a very brief run. Its the strongest Lamborgihni ever.

Expertenantwort
von AstridDerPu, Community-Experte für Englisch, 16

My first new (Wort) is over (Präposition, kein Artikel) super tuesday (RS) in America (Wort). (---) Super Tuesday in the 2016 presidential election was held on March 1 in 12 states (Ort vor Zeit).

The Democratic primaries and caucuses concluded with Bernie Sanders
winning Colorado, Minnesota, Oklahoma, and Vermont; and Hillary Clinton
winning Alabama, Arkansas, Georgia, Massachusetts, Tennessee, Texas, and
Virginia. Clinton received 486 delegates, while Sanders received 321.
The Republican primaries and caucuses concluded with Donald Trump
winning Alabama, Arkansas, Georgia, Massachusetts, Tennessee, Vermont,
and Virginia; Ted Cruz winning Alaska, Oklahoma, and Texas; and Marco
Rubio winning Minnesota. John Kasich and Ben Carson were also in the
election, but neither won any states.

Auch dein Lehrer ist nicht auf der Brennsuppe dahergeschwommen und merkt sofort, dass du diesen Abschnitt abgeschrieben hast.

Einen offensichtlich in großen Teilen abgekupferten Text korrigiere ich nicht.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

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AstridDerPu

Antwort
von Marshl, 22

Is das vom Google Übersetzer?

Hier mal die Änderungen für den ersten Abschnitt:

My first piece of news is about the 'Super Tuesday' in the United States of America. This year's 'Super Tuesday' of the presidential election was on the 1(st) March and all in all, twelve countries took part.

(Bsp.)

Antwort
von StrawmanX, 17

Anstatt "news" schreib lieber "news story",anstatt "lamborgihni Centenario Unveiled this week at the Geneva motor show" schreib lieber "Lamborghini Centenario, which was unveiled this week at the Geneva motor show"

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