Frage von Zyzz26, 71

Wer findet fehler in der gramatik?

hallo leute ich muss in englisch eine zusammenfassung schreiben und wollte fragen, ob ihr irgendwelche gramatik fehler findet. bitte helft mir ist sehr wichtig.

The text excerpts on the pages 48-52 of the English book “Abiturwissen Landeskunde GB/USA“, deal with immigrants from all over the world in Britain. reibe

The transformation from an Anglo-Saxon into a multicultural society is the most important change in Britain. The words „classs“ and „ethnicity“ get an special meaning after a big amount of black people, Indians, Pakistanies and Bangladeshis start to immigrate to Britain.

The Immigrants have many reasons for their immigration to Britain. Among other many are attrcted because of living conditions or the possibility to get a job. For this reason many people get employment in industries like textiles, coal or shipbuilding. Furthermore they have no problems in language skills which is reflecting by the fact that ware teached by Britains. In addition many black people join the British army and fight during World War 2.

Pakistanies get work in shipbuilding and in industries. As the number of Asians rise to 15% in the Yorkshire it reigns violence. During Indians seetle in the Midlands, West Indians live in bigger cities. Currently they work in public services like hospitals or buses.

While German „guestworkers“ emigrate from countries in Europe, most British immigrants are from all over the world and have different religions or cultures. They differ in their language, education and their social habits what leads to violence. In addition there is the language problem which causes less sozial contacts, because immigrant families do not speak English at home.

Previously the conditions for black people is different, they are not successful and form the underclass in Britain. They still have worse chances than withe people in finding a job for example and live more often in unemployment. They are used to fill worse jobs which nobody wants to have, jobs which are unattractive and poorly paid. At the time as the Britiah econimic is deteriorated, many black people use their job because of better qualificated people. Over the last ten years the immigrants situation is getting better. Though hard work and their power of will they work they way up to the top. In addition black competitors gain growing recognitation and among to the best in thee world. In contrast to them, the West Indians form the gratest percentage of under-achievers, so they live in council houses in slum conditions. Reasons for their situation are racial discrimination and intolerance. Especially youths suffer by racial prejudice

The racial integration is controlled in special ways. So the white society improve controlls and the speed of handling appeals and deportations, relieve integration of accepted immigrants and lead measures for terrorists. Moreover the Government tries to stop discrimination and create good relations for alle people no matter where they come from.

Antwort
von ChickPea, 12

Ehrlich, das ist ein langer text und es ist eine Menge zu verbessern. (Nicht nur Grammatik).

Hier nur mal meine Idee zu den ersten zwei Absaetzen:

The text excerpts on the (weg damit) pages 48-52 of the English book “Abiturwissen Landeskunde GB/USA“ (das Buch ist in Englisch hat aber einen deutschen Titel?), deal(s) (wobei ich ein anderes Wort als "deals" waehlen wuerde) with immigrants from all over the world in Britain. reibe (Wer oder was ist 'reibe')

The transformation from an Anglo-Saxon society into a multicultural one is (was? - was and still is) the most important change in Britain. The words „classs“ and „ethnicity“ get an (a) special meaning after a big amount (dicke Zahl? Versuch 'large amount') of black people, Indians, Pakistanies and Bangladeshis start to immigrate (ich dachte die sind schon da?) to Britain.

So, das nur mal auf die schnelle. Vielleicht hat wer anders noch mehr Zeit und motivation noch mal komplett drueber zu sehen.

Expertenantwort
von AstridDerPu, Community-Experte für Englisch & Grammatik, 9

... und was ist mit den Rechtschreib-, Ausdrucks- und Zeichenfehlern?

The text excerpts on the pages 48-52 of the English book
“Abiturwissen Landeskunde GB/USA“, deal with immigrants from all over
the world in Britain. reibe

The transformation from an Anglo-Saxon into a multicultural society
is the most important change in Britain. The words „classs“ and
„ethnicity“ get an special meaning after a big amount of black people,
Indians, Pakistanies and Bangladeshis start to immigrate to Britain.

The Immigrants have many reasons for their immigration to Britain.
Among other many are attrcted because of living conditions or the
possibility to get a job. For this reason many people get employment in
industries like textiles, coal or shipbuilding. Furthermore they have no
problems in language skills which is reflecting by the fact that ware
teached
by Britains. In addition many black people join the British army
and fight during World War 2.

Pakistanies get work in shipbuilding and in industries. As the number
of Asians rise to 15% in the Yorkshire it reigns violence. During
Indians seetle in the Midlands, West Indians live in bigger cities.
Currently they work in public services like hospitals or buses.

While German „guestworkers“ emigrate from countries in Europe, most
British immigrants are from all over the world and have different
religions or cultures. They differ in their language, education and
their social habits what leads to violence. In addition there is the
language problem which causes less sozial contacts, because immigrant
families do not speak English at home.

Previously the conditions for black people is different, they are not
successful and form the underclass in Britain. They still have worse
chances than withe people in finding a job for example and live more
often in unemployment
. They are used to fill worse jobs which nobody
wants to have, jobs which are unattractive and poorly paid. At the time
as the Britiah econimic is deteriorated, many black people use their job
because of better qualificated people
. Over the last ten years the
immigrants situation is getting better. Though hard work and their power
of will they work they
way up to the top. In addition black competitors
gain growing recognitation and among to the best in thee world. In
contrast to them, the West Indians form the gratest percentage of
under-achievers, so they live in council houses in slum conditions.
Reasons for their situation are racial discrimination and intolerance.
Especially youths suffer by racial prejudice

The racial integration is controlled in special ways. So the white
society improve controlls and the speed of handling appeals and
deportations, relieve integration of accepted immigrants and lead
measures for
terrorists. Moreover the Government tries to stop
discrimination and create good relations for alle people no matter where
they come from.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden.
Ich habe mich weitestgehend auf die Grammatik und die auffälligsten Fehler beschränkt und auf Erklärungen verzichtet, da die Textmenge hier den Rahmen sprengt.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!.

:-) AstridDerPu

Antwort
von Mimir99, 32

Nur mal so vom drübersehen : Die "gramatik" ist nicht dein einziges Problem, die Rechtschreibung und deine Vokabeln solltest du auch verbessern.

Kommentar von Zyzz26 ,

krasse hilfe, leider keine antwort auf meine frage. 

Kommentar von Mimir99 ,

Genau genommen schon. Du hast gefragt, ob jemand Fehler findet, und das habe ich. Und attracted because of living conditions ist ein Logikfehler.

Kommentar von Zyzz26 ,

den satz habe ich 1 zu 1 vom buch abgeschrieben lol

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