Ideen/ Korrekturen für mein englisches Anschreiben?
Hallo, ich bewerbe mich für ein Praktikum in Asien und mein Anschreiben braucht noch einen Feinschliff. Was haltet ihr davon? Vorschläge oder Fehler gefunden? Vielen Dank :-) Dear Mr ***, my name is *** and I am in my fourth year of a Bachelor of Arts of * at the University of *. My main subjects fit perfectly in your description for the internship just as my work for an event agency. They give me the experience and skills you are looking for. So I’m writing you to express my extremely interest in applying for the internship. My suitability for the position is first demonstrated through my studies which equip me for a wide variety of organizational and consultancy roles that demand expertise in information and knowledge management. As a part of my studies I designed and programmed an App for Android with the eclipse program in the last year. So it would be nice to help you to build up a community of an Open Source Project for eclipse. Besides the technological aspects I’m especially interested in my main subject’s online marketing and media where I am very passionate about. Parallel to my studies I’m working for an event agency in . has given me the opportunity to work in the areas of event management. Here, I worked on a series of projects and events which furthered my ability to work and think independently. I gained a lot of experience and great contacts and I have learned to face and solve problems too. Since over one year I have been privileged to lead a team of five in connection of a production of a german TV show which strengthened my organization and teamwork skills. I wish to further develop the skills that I have gained and would like the opportunity to transfer them to environment through working for . I know from certain events and I also working on the ***, which arouses my interest for the internet of things and your company. Thank you for your kind consideration. If you like to have more certificates or references please feel free to contact me. Kind regards, *
Englisch Präsentation! die Rechtschreibung/ Grammatik so richtig?
Geography Queensland is located in the North-East of the Australien continent and is the second largest State in Australia. It is more than five times as large as Germany or Britain. The population is about 4.5 and more than the half are living in Brisbane. With New South Wales is Queensland the state with the largest proportion of Aboriginal. There live 26 percent of the total Aboriginal population of Australia. The capital is Brisbane with a population of 1.5. Other bigger towns in Queensland are Gold Coast, Townsville, Cairns und Rockhampton. Nature Reserve in Queensland are the big Barrier reef, Fraser Island and the rain forest on the cape York Island in the north of the state. History The Europeans discovered queensland for the first time in the 1600s. They came about the golf of Carpentaria. It belonged till 1851 to New South Wales and was called only in 1859 by queen Elisabeth completely as an own federal state. From the 3rd of Semptember, 1824 to 10th of December 1859, was the british colony Queensland a part of New South Wales. On the 26th of June, 1879 Torres Strait Island and Barrier Reef/Whitsunday Iceland was assigned to Queensland. Queensland became on the 1st of January, 1901 a federal state of Australia. Climate In the south of Queensland is the climate tropical, warm, sunny with mild winters. More to the north the climate becomes slowly tropical. The tropical summer begins here from January to April with rain and storms. The average temperatures amount in summer between 21 degrees and 29 degrees, in winter between 10 degrees and 26 degrees. Because of his pleasant climate is queensland often called also Sunshine State. In the region of the tropical north of queensland is the temperature in summer between 24 degrees to 31 degrees, in winter 10 to 16 degrees. Because of the low air humidity are in Queensland often forest fires. National Park The national park Barron Gorge is especially known for his tropical rainforest. Here are living animals like kangaroos, beak animals, bats, birds and butterflies. Tortoises live in the Barron- river together with fishes like Welsen and eels. The Barron Gorge National Park has an own railway station and is at the same time a part of the traditional area of the native(Aborigines).Waterfalls can be enjoyed on the Observation Tower. It is located directly at the train station. Particularly at high water is the view a true experience.
Kann mir bitte jemand meinen Text den ich übersetzt habe korrigieren?
Ich habe hier meine Eurokom schon auf Englisch umgeschrieben und wollte wissen, ob sich in dem Text noch Fehler befinden? Wäre schön, wenn mir jemand, der sich mit Englisch gut auskennt helfen würde und meine Fehler gleich verbessern könnte? Vielen Dank im Voraus! Mit freundlichen Grüßen DerKeks121 Welcome to my presentation about the Rolling Stones The Rolling Stones were formed in 1962 and are a British rock band. The band is one of the longest and most successful groups in rock history. The band exist from Mick Jagger (singer), Keith Richards (guitar), Ron Wood (guitar), Charlie Watts (drums) End of 1961, Mick Jagger and Keith Richards met a Platform. They knew each other from their common playschool and school years. Both recognized that they are interested in the same music and agreed to meet for listening to music. Jagger met in his free time some time with former school friend Dick Taylor to make music together. You name Taylor and played in a threesome in the back room of his parents apartment and named themselves "Little Boy Blue and the Blue Boys". They met guitarist Brian Jones know, AT that time named himself Elmo Lewis. Brian Jones fell on as guitarist, by its bottleneck technic. Giorgio Gomelsky founded the legendary Crawdaddy Club in Richmond, the springboard of the Rolling Stones. Ahmet Ertegun founded Atlantic Records in 1947. With his partners he made to one of the leading independent Atlantic labels for R & B, jazz and rock music. 1970 The Rolling Stones came up to him to be drive out to sell their own label through Atlantic Records. The 10 best songs of the Rolling Stones: 1. Under My Thumb 2. Paint It, Black 3. (I Can’t Get No) Satisfaction 4. Honky Tonk Women 5. Angie 6. Brown Sugar 7. Wild Horses 8. Dead Flowers 9. Shine A Light 10. No Expectations
Englisch Fragestellung was falsch?
hallo ich habe bei einer Hü in englisch einen fehler weis aber net wie ich in verbessern soll hier der Satz Which colours have the german national fllag ? Das have ist falsch aber was gehört statt dem hin
Englisch Dialog......sind da fehler?
Hi ich muss in englisch einen selbst geschriebenen Dialog auswendig lernen und vortragen wollte nur mal wissen ob der Dialog auch richtig ist wen jemand Fehler sieht bitte schreiben ...Danke schon ma :) G: Hello young ladies can i help you? K: yes, Mr. G. we have some questions. G: Okay, lets go M: Why were Viginia in the 18th century Britans richest colony? G:because of the tabbacco plantations, because there work cheep black slaves. M: Oh, its very interessting K: I have heard that a lot of slaves in the age of ten died it is really true? G: yes, of course its really hard . K: Who did all the work? G:black slaves for example the house slaves, they must clean the masters house and look after the children other were felt slaves and skilled slaves. What do you think how long must a slave work on a day? M+K: I dont know maybe ten hours. G: No they must worked 16 h on a day. M: How many breaks have the slaves. G:Not many often only one on a day k.Where the slaves come fromand how did they arrive? G: Its a simple Question they arrived with ships and they come from Africa K: How many slaves worked at a plantation? G:On big Plantations from rich famalys worked more then 100 slaves M.there are runways and whats happen with them? G: Yes, a lot but the most of them were found. K: there are punishments ( Strafen)? bei den Antworten gehts weiter ... muss noch schreiben dauert a bissl ...
Habe ich Fehler gemacht? - Englisch
Habe ich Fehler gemacht? :I Captain James Cook, who was a British explorer, navigator, cartographer and captain in the Royal Navy, was sent by the British government to discover an unknown southern continent although it was inhabited. The British called it terra nullius which means nobodys land, because Aborigines were nomadic people who did not live in one place and did not cultivate the land to grow crops. John Lockes idea was that people could not gain property in land if they could not "till the soil" which means mixing labour with land. The Aborigines and Indians share the idea of land that nobody could say it is his land, because land belongs to everybody. The Aborigines were seen as uncultivated by the British. This attitude lead to the belief in the natural superiority of the race,groups etc. they belonged to. They often felt dislike of people of other ethnic groups. The "stolen generation" were mixed-blood children with fair skin, an aboriginal mother and a white father. The Children were stolen for a racist ideal and taken to a home for orphans. Missionaries prepared them for a life of service. If they tried to run away, they were beaten, their hair was shaved off and locked up in rooms. Often there was sexual violence against girls. The children were not allowed to speak their own language and absorbed into the white society. The white Australians wanted the Aborigines and their traditions to die out. The stealing of children ended after 60 years in 1970. But after 11 years later, Australia ist finally saying sorry.
Kann mir jemand, der gut Englisch kann, meinen Englisch Text korrigieren?
Hallo! Ich habe bald eine sehr wichtige Klausur und als 'Training' habe ich einen Artikel zum Thema 'message clothing' verfasst. Da ich wirklich keine Ahnung habe, ob der Text grammatikalisch richtig ist oder die Satzstellung passt, wäre es sehr hilfreich, wenn ihn mir jemand korrigieren könnte. Dankeschön (: Hier der article: Today clothes are very important for our society. Every year T-shirts with new designs come out. But what about message clothing? Do you have any T-Shirts with messages on it? And what do you think about it? Message clothing can benefit the fashion industry a lot. They need new ideas for better T-shirts. But not everybody likes message T-shirts. Some people find this very silly, because they think it is unneeded to write on a T-shirt what we think and like. Also the design plays a great role. When the T-Shirt looks ugly, not many people would buy it. So there has to be new concepts for better Shirts. You can make a lot of money with the right message clothing. Slogans like 'feel good' aren't really good for a T-shirt. It should be more creative like 'I don't do fashion. I am fashion'. Such slogans would be a courser in every clothing store. The design should not be very fancy. It should be simple and pretty. Colours like black, white or green are fashionable colours. Another important thing is to produce message clothing for both sex. Boys like message clothing similar like girls. Of course they need different message, but that shouldn't be a big problem. So all in all the fashion industry can make a lot of money with this T-Shirts. They are fashionable, say something about a person and very useful. The best thing with which we can improve this Shirts is, to make something new.
Ist der Text Grammatisch in Ordnung? (Englisch)
Ich habe morgen Mündliche Abschluss Prüfung, und habe einen Text, den ich lernen möchte, ich möchte allerdings keine Grammatikfehler machen, deshalb möchte ich euch fragen, ob ihr Grammatikfehler im Text findet. Hi, i want to tell you something about me, My name is XXX, im XXX years old, and im in XXX grade at the XXXX I live in a little village in XXX, and my regular place is my room. In my room I have many shelves, a bed, 2 computers, a desk and a TV. And at home, all of my family have his own daily routines, for example my routine, Every day, my mum wakes me up at 6am. This is a bit early, but i should eat something and brush my theeth. When I am finished with all this, i go to the busstation in XXX, and wait for the bus. Then, the rest of the day, i will stay at school. Before i forget, i want to tell you something about my family. I have two sisters, my older sister is called XXX, she works as a specialist for application development at Dataport, her office is in XXX. My other sister is called XXX, she is in the last year of training as a attorney and notary clerk. Her office is in XXX. And we have a cat in our family. Her name is XXX, we don’t know how old she is, because she was strayed to us 5 or 6 years ago. But now, it was a good idea of her, to come to us. In my freetime i sometimes play with my cat. For example with a branch or with wool. But i do also other things in my free time, my favorite activity is jumping on my trampoline. I am every day on my trampoline, if it is sunny. Now, i want to tell you something about the Arguments in my family about school and pocket money. My parents say every day to me: “School is important, you have to learn more”, and i get annoyed, when i hear this sentences. My parents are sometimes very strict with me. And when i will learn every day, they give me a little bit pocket money every month. I got the double of money in the class, i am. For example, if i am in 6th grade, i will get 12 € or if i am in 10th grade, i will get 20€. But when i finished with school, i will get my own money. But the hook is, i dont know really what i want to be. But i have already a jobidea. A job as a specialist for system integration. Because i made a practical training in this job 2 months ago. But before i go in the world of jobs, i will do maybe another practical training. Mit freundlichen Grüßen Eselers
Englisch text überprüfen "News of the week"?
Today I want to present you a kind of news of the week. So first I tell you something about the elections 2016 in the U.S. and connect this with the result of our questionnaire, which now is a bit older and yeah. After this I will present an article of an adventure. So first before I start with my first article I like to tell you something about the elections or better saying about the primaries generally. Primaries belong to political tradition in the United States. While in Germany parties dominate, it´s about individuals in America like Barack Obama. At the primaries candidate several candidates, who may also be in the same party like Hillary Clinton and Bernie Sanders. The primaries are there to offer the voters the greatest possible choice opportunity, to test the suitability of candidates for high office and to support democracy. The primaries began on the first day of February and go until 14th June to elect on the 8th november the 45th president. So back to my article. I chose an article from New York Times with the title “Connecticut Primary result” and this was published on the second day of May. In this article are listed the results of the primaries in Connecticut from the 26 of april. From the results the following winners go out: At the republicans wins Trump with 57,9 percent and at the democrats wins Hillary Clinton with 51,8 percent. And on this picture you can see Connecticut with the capitel Hartford. On the left map you can see the result of the republicans, so the blue marked shows where the second winner, Kasich, won and the red marked shows the country’s that chose Trump. And on the right picture it is the same, so the blue marked stands for Clinton and the green Market stands for Sanders. Yeah so in our questionnaire we let the republicans compete against the Democrats, as if the president election already started. I have examined the results of our questionaire of the class 11 b. These shows that the democrats have won with 69 percent while the republicans scored just 32 percent. It was conspicuous that in the category Same-sex marriage, the Democrats won significant because the Republicans received only two votes. There was no category where the republicans have won. So the result is very clearly. And now I want to present you something completely different. I chose an article from cnn news with the title „Missing mom, daughter rescued from New Zealand forest“. This article was published on second day of May. Rachel Lloyd and her mother Carolyn Lloyd live in North Carolina and travelled to New Zealand to hike through the nature. They started their hiking adventure on the Kapakapanui Track of Tararua Forrest Park on Tuesday. While their adventure they became disoriented on the course, because they followed the blue markers, which were in place for opossum tracking, instead of following the orange markers for the right way. During the walk off the trail, Rachel became injured on her head, because she slipped
Sind diese Sätze korrekt? bitte sorgfälig prüfen und auch den kleinsten Fehler bitte erwähnen.. falls welche drine sind. Falls es bessere Formuliersmöglichkeiten gibt, bitte die auch posten. Die Sätze: Emu: The emus are the second biggest bird in the world. They can run very fast with their strong legs. But the emu can't fly. Koala: The koalas look like a bear. They eat only eucalyptus leaves. They sleep durinh the day, because the koalas are active at night. The babys are carried at the pouch or at the back. kangaroo: The kangaroo is the most famous Australian animal. It eats leaves and some of them climb trees. All kangaroos can hop very fast with their long strong back legs. The kangaroo are 1 cm at the birth and it was born blind.(wie könnte man den letzten satz besser formulieren?) platypus: The platypus is a mammal, which can stay for five minutes under the water. They eat insects and live in the water.They can lay eggs. It has the size of a cat.(Bessere Formulierung es hört sich an als hätten die Eier eine größe eines katzes....) Vielen Dank schonmal. Bitte ALLE Fehler. Weil jeder Fehler könnte für mich eine Note schlechter sein(: Ich hab keine gefunden
Brauche dringend Hilfe für meinen englischen Aufsatz (Grammatik Fehler etc?)
Hallo wir müssen in Englishc einen Aufsatz schreiben. Diesen habe ich nun fertig geschrieben und ich denke ich habe noch einige grammatikalische Fehler darin vorhanden. Ich bitte um Hilfe :) Danke schonmal im vorraus! War on terror in Afghanistan since 2001 In the year 2001 George W. Bush declared war in Afghanistan and on 7th October 2001 there were the first aerial attacks on Afghanistan. But why they wage war with Afghanistan? At first the stay of the Islamic extremist Osama Bin Laden at the domain in Taliban led to conflict with the USA. After the terror attacks at the World Trade Center 9/11 George W. Bush declared war in Afghanistan. They make war on terror. The USA blamed Bin Laden and Al Qaeda for the attacks. Because the terrorists were members of the Taliban and this is in Afghanistan. The war in Afghanistan goes ahead as follows: Since the first aerial attacks 2001 on Afghanistan the NATO supports the USA. The USA built a foreign-policy alliance against terror. In addition the UK helps the USA. Another ally is Russia. On 16th November the Bundestag in Germany gave his approval to the anti-terror operation from the German armed forces. Furthermore the Northern Alliance conquered Mazar- iSharif and later the capital city Kabul. On 8th December 2001 they conquered the last important city Kandahar. After that the USA bombed Tora Bora, where they supposed Osama Bin Laden. They decided the appointment from an interim government in a conference on the Petersberg in Bonn. The Security Council by the UNO decided on 20th December 2001 the appointment from the security force ISAF. Afterwards the Taliban gained in strength and the military conflicts grew again. Therefore the ISAF with the operation Achilles conducted the largest military operation in Afghanistan since 2001. On 2th May 2001 US soldiers killed Osama bin Laden. Today the people are tired of the war. And Obama announced to retreat the soldiers and top the war in 2014. This war raises the question whether or not it can be justified by 9/11 from a legal point of view as well as from a moral point of view. This war has been illegal from its beginning because since 1945 the law of nations has been defined by the UN-charter. Another point is that every military action against another nation is illegal. This is precisely the reason that in my opinion this war can’t be justified by 9/11 from a legal point of view as well from a moral point of view.
Könnt ihr einmal nach Fehlern im Englisch Handout gucken und wenn ihr welche findet mir sie einmal erklären was falsch ist?
Englisch 9e Hans and Sophie Scholl 5.06.2016 Background Education and Jobs For what they have fought for? • Against the national socialist Regime • Stop genocid • United Europe • End of the war “Weisse Rose“ (White Rose) • Student group in munich 1942/1943 • Members: Hans an Sophie Scholl, Alexander Schmorell, Christoph Probst, Willi Graf and Professor Kurt Huber • 6 Leaflets • 6000-9000 copies in six german and austrian cities • They painted house wall with the slogans “Down with Hitler“ or “Freedome“ Their Character • Selfless • Quote: “I can not imagine that people constantly are put in dangerous situation by other people. I can not understand it and i think it is appalling. Do not say: “It is for the Fatherland“!“ – Sophie Scholl • Clever • They recognize the crime of the regime and that Germany will lose Consequences bei manchen punkten steht noch nix weil das die punkte von einer Freundin sind ich bin euch sehr dankbar LG jassi19
Englisch: Ones oder One / Going to do
Soo jetzt reicht es aber wirklich, ich stelle hier eine Frage und keine Hausübung, zwecks Nachweis kann ich gerne die Schularbeit hochladen ! Es wurde bei der Schularbeit 2. AHS um 2 Punkte eine bessere Note verpasst. Ich denke nicht, dass ich hier nach Hilfestellung bitte, um meine Hausübung zu machen, denn ich studiere bereits Wirtschaftsinformatik auf der TU Wien, soviel zum Thema Hausübungshilfe. Leider ist auch mein Englisch etwas eingerostet, wobei ich mir ziemlich sicher bin hier liegt ein Fehler vor ! Es geht um Trainers (Turnschuhe) Zu meiner Zeit in der AHS haben wir gelernt, dass bei trainers, troussers etc. ones kommt. B: yes please i want some new trainers A: do you want black ones B:black ones please A: try this ones --> das wurde hier als falsch markiert, aber warum kommt ONE rein ? hmm..yes thats ok. can i try the other ones on too please --> hier wurde ebenfalls von der Professorin das ONES als falsch markiert, warum kommt hier one ? Ich möchte morgen zur Sprechstunde, falls Sie falsch beurteilt hat. Ich hätte auch gerne Bezugsquellen, die belegen, dass sie falsch liegt, falls sie falsch liegen sollte. Going to do: hier muss man laut Angabe einen Fehler korrigieren. What are you do this weekend --> What are you going to do this weekend (Hier wurde das "to" durchgestrichen. What are you going do this weekend ergibt für mich keinen Sinn. Das wären somit 3 Punkte die nicht gegeben worden sind, wo ich mich frage, ob das nun berechtigt ist oder nicht ! An alle Theoretiker, nein dies hier ist keine HÜ-Hilfestellung, es ist eine gute Frage, um mehr Wissen zu erlangen und eventuell, bei Fehler seitens der AHS-Professorin, eine bessere Note zu beantragen. Danke :)
Kann jemand diesen englischen Comment Korrektur lesen?
A comment on the topic “Abortion” A contentious issue: ABORTION. Nowadays more and more women have an abortion. But whether this interference with nature really is lawfully remains doubtful and will be discussed now. Proponents of abortion say the argument that the woman has the right to decide about her body and thus about her pregnancy or an abortion. So no one has to care about her decision. This is true, but in the womb the embryo is already a living being and therefore the embryo is an individual and has a right to life. In addition, the argument is repeatedly mentioned that the pregnancy was unwanted, the mothers are to young or have no partner. But I think this is the worst argument at all. There are umpteen ways to prevent a pregnancy. But if you were maybe too stupid or too lazy to preventing, it is you own fault. In such cases, there are still help sites for mothers or the option to release the child for adoption. Moreover, an abortion is murder. Abortions dine by some medications or methods like scrape or vacuum. Many people say that the embryo does not feel any pain during abortions, but this is also false. Embryos already have a heartbeat or a nervous system in the third week of pregnancy, so they can feel pain. All in one, I believe that an abortion is not morally justifiable. Nevertheless, there should be exceptions like if the pregnancy resulted from rape or the pregnancy constitutes a danger to the woman. When you have an abortion you kill your own flesh and blood. This action can’t be reversed, and I am sure that every woman who decides to have an abortion will get mental problems. At the end, the woman has to decide with the father about an abortion, because in Germany an abortion is allowed up to the 3rd month. So I’m against a abortion – there are too many ways to get not into such a situation. If you get into such a situation, you have to cope with the consequences.
Ist das ein richtiger Text - Englisch?
Wär nett, wenn ihr mir die Fehler kennzeichnen würdet oder ob der Satzbau richtig ist. Also, es geht um eine Reportage über ein Fußball Match auf Englisch - In the Combia Football Stadiumin China was on the 30th September 2007 a match with Germany against Brazil. The German team won with a 2:0. The first win which the German team won, was in year 2003 and in year 2007, the second time! The first half endet and nobody scored a goal, but many chances got both teams! After six minutes Richardt König scored thr 1:0 for Germany! And in the 86th minute scored Simone Rokkert the 2:0 for Germany and the match endet! Wenn die Fehler evt. korrigiert werden, würde ich mich freuen ^-^ Ich weiß, ich bin schlecht in englisch! Danke
Englisch Kurzgeschichte auf Fehler überarbeiten?
Since long time we wanted to spend a day together or rather I wanted it. I was able to persuade Martin, my husband, to go shopping with me. We were standing at the cash register when I saw him suddenly: Giovanni. Giovanni and I were friends in the past, put Martin was in my eyes smarter than Giovanni so I left him. I almost did not recognize him. But then I watched him in his ice-blue eyes and everything was clear. He had lost weight - at least 10 kilos. He had his usual short stubble grow as a full beard. Earlier Martin also had a beard, which I always found irresistible . Today he shaved daily. Six years had now passed and there was still some between Giovanni and me. I could literally feel like my mouth was open. "Hello Sandra," he said in his deep and dangerous voice which I’ve always found great. Martin wanted to prefer to go back , but I was as firmly rooted and stared at Giovanni. I felt that Martin was unsure. "Hello Giovanni ," Martin finally replied in a dry and bored tone . "Long time ago. Great you have become . " It did not surprise me that Martin gave him a spell . That was among the reasons why I decided for Martin when I had the choice . I liked his common sayings , but at this moment I cursed them. But what he said was true. Giovanni had lost not only 10 kilograms he also grown by half the weight. Now he was even bigger than Martin . "Oh Martin ," groaned Giovanni and smiled at me , so his dimples again came to light. Martin had no dimples and inexplicably, I felt the need to touch them . "Still porter as a profession ?" Martin asked as he sneered . The situation was more than unpleasant. I knew how much Giovanni was ashamed of his job as a porter while Martin did carreer with his father as a businessman of LM Real Estate. That was another reason why I chose Martin. "No , I am now a owner of several bars ," Giovanni replied proudly and I found myself , as I was happy for him inside. "How great," Martin said ironically . "You 're welcome to come over time." "No thanks." "Sandra. I said Sandra , " Giovanni added and smiled at me. That was his typical Italian charm , for whom I have always had a weakness . It is this charm it had not then made it easy for me to decide . Giovanni has always been the romantics , while Martin could not even spell the word . And suddenly I was not sure who was the Smarter by both. Before, I was absolutely convinced of Martin, but I just panicked to have chosen me wrong. "Sandra has as well not want it," Martin said to me. But I was too focused on the girl next to Giovanni contrast to say something. The young woman turned to us and patterned us - just like them I. She had perfect Ashy colored short hair and beaming of merriment. "Do you want me not to imagine?" She asked him with her tender voice. "Sandra, this is my wife. Isabell, that's my ex-girlfriend Sandra, "he said, whereupon she looked disgusted at me. "Oh." Giovanni looked at me tortured and suffering, which I almost broke the heart. I did not
Grammatik-oder Ausdrucksfehler in Englisch?
Hallo, ich bräuchte Hilfe bei den folgenden Stichpunkten. Würde gerne wissen,ob Grammatik-als auch Ausdrucksfehler zu finden sind.Wäre lieb, wenn ihr mir da weiter helfen könntet. ! Chapter II,8 Kyra and Delaney: • Season: fall • Delaney can´t deside a topic to write about • While he sits on his desk the door knocks • One Mexican worker wants him to leave the side gate open • Delaney feels like he is under siege/ like he is walled in • Regrets that he did not campaigned against the wall • At 6 o´clock he drives to the Da Ros property to help Kyra lock it • Kyra notices that Delaney is in a bad mood • She has bought him a stepladder so he can get over the wall whenever he wants • Delaney changes his opinion about the wall It also keeps people like the Dagolians away • However he does not want to show it to Kyra • On their way back home Delaney buys some last items for Thanksgiving at a supermarket • He Wants to cook for his family and friends • He Realizes that he is happy about having a wife like Kyra and is willing to forget the matter of the wall America and Candido: • Candido does not welcome the season either • He is afraid about the future his son was going to be born, no job, no home • America has a break down and does not talk to him because of the Canoga Park incident • Candido finds work by Senhor WillisNew hope • América still keeps on ignoring him • On Theenksgiving two men give him a free turkey • At home he starts a fire to roast it • Because of the wind it starts to burn the trees around their house
Bitte einmal korrigieren:) Englisch Essay über mich
Könnt Ihr bitte einmal rüberlesen und korrigieren? Ich muss das nächste Woche abgeben. Vielen Dank im Voraus! My name is Franziska Jaekel and my life began on the 18th of August 1991. I was born in Greifswald and lived were until we, that’s my parents and me, moved to Grimmen were we build a house. I had a very peaceful childhood. I love my parents from the bottom of my heart and I owe them much. The “ Friedrich- Willhelm Wander-Schule” wars me primary school. At the age of 11 I defect to the “Gymnasium Grimmen” and achieved my A levels in 2010. In August 2010 I went to Australia for 5 months. It´s was a very interesting time. Back to Germany I started my studies at a university of Greifswald and want to be aimed to become the teacher of history and religion. On account of a hands-on training I changed my plan and wrote an application to the “Berufsfachschule Bandelin” to train as kindergarten teacher. So I started my application at the 1st of September 2012. My most favorite hobby is riding. I went to horse barn on every free minute, till my parents to granted to buy an own horse. Today I´m owner of six horses and give riding lesson three times at week. My other hobbies are reading, laughing, talking and having fun. I love it to spend time with my boyfriend. We have an dog and we really like it to take a walk with it. I really hope my life will be so great like my past. I want to marry my boyfriend and have two or three kids. Also I want to work as a kindergarten teacher with nice kids and colleagues. Time will tell if my dreams come true but I´m confident.
Kann jemand meinen kurzen Englisch Text überfliegen und nach Fehlern suchen?
The main character of the short story „The swim team“ written by Miranda July in 2007, is named Maria, is 22 years old and lives alone in Belvedere, a small city, which is free from swimming pools. There is only a gas station and a market in Belvedere. She would like to move, but she don’t have enough money (she don’t have a car or phone as well) and she don’t like to ask his parents, although she write every week to them. Her life is very boring (line 9-11), because she have nothing to do and no friends until she listens to a talk of three 80-years-old-persons, called Elizabeth, Kelda and Jack Jack, who can’t swim but they want to. So she suggests to teach them in swimming, because she learned in High School, and later she gives „swimming lessons“ to them twice a week in her living room with bowls of water and a kitchen floor. At the beginning of the story Maria is a little bit shy, she don’t like to speak with other people and starts tob e exited. (line 35-37) But at the end of the story Maria is a strong and purposeful coach, who dares to talk and to say what to do. (line 97-98) These swim lessons gives Maria something to do and she miss the lessons later.
Englisch Aufsatz über Boston
Hallo, ich bin ein Schüler der 4. Klasse Hauptschule (8.Schulstufe). Ich habe bald Englisch SA und wir müssen einen Aufsatz über Boston schreiben. Ich bin nicht der beste im Aufsatz schreiben und deswegen möchte ich, dass ihr mich bitte auf Fehler aufmerksam macht! Danke. Boston Boston is the capital and largest city of the U.S. state Massachusetts. There life about 600000 people. The size (soll ich area nehmen?) of Boston is 232.14 km². It's a city on the east coast of the united states. They have teams in the best league of all four major sports. The major sports are: basketball, football, baseball and hockey. The team in football is the "New England Patriots" team. In hockey the teame calls "Boston Bruins". In baseball the "Boston Red Sox" and in basketball the "Boston Celtics". Boston also is famous for the freedom trail. The street is about four kilometers long. If you follow the red line on the ground, you can see a lot of famous buildings. Bitte kommt nicht mit kommentare wie "Mann, der kann nix" oder "Soviele RS-Fehler". Bitte weist mich auf Fehler direkt hin! Danke schon im vorraus!