Frage von Biophyte, 55

Wäre dies ein guter Comment?

Hallo liebe Community,

ich schreibe morgen eine Klausur und bin am pauken wie so ein Irrer. Leider bin ich nicht besonders gut in Englisch und bräuchte zumindest ein paar Feedbacks. Bin im ersten Jahr der Oberstufe und nicht im Leistungskurs (Englisch).

MfG

Hahpuh

Expertenantwort
von AstridDerPu, Community-Experte für Englisch, 9

Hallo,

1. musst du den Text schon hier reinhacken oder reinkopieren, so ist das zu umständlich

2. sprengt die Textlänge hier den Rahmen

3. enthält der Text viel zu viele Fehler

Es beginnt schon damit, dass du die erste Regel, die man im Englischunterricht lernt He, she, it das s muss mit. (Was also hat das s am Verb nach they zu suchen.) nicht beachtest,

und endet damit, dass live nicht Leben bedeutet!

Du musst bei der Rechtschreibung und der Übersetzung wie folgt unterscheiden:

- live (Adj; Adv) [laɪv]

- live (Verb) [lɪv]

- life, Plural lives (Nomen) [laɪf, pl laɪvz]

:-) AstridDerPu

Antwort
von Biophyte, 12

Rechtschreibfehler sind nicht unbedingt von belang.

Antwort
von kirstenhaus16, 12

ich bin australierin und kann die das korrigieren wenn du willst

Kommentar von Biophyte ,

That would be nice dude :-D

Kommentar von kirstenhaus16 ,

kannst du mir das per email schicken? kuhnertkw@ewe.net

Kommentar von Biophyte ,

Gesendet, möglichst schnell Kirsten, da ich gleich ins Bett muss und morgen die Arbei schreibe .

Kommentar von Biophyte ,

Nowadays it is very important to know what young
people thinks about being a child or a young person and in that case a survey
was created in England. As a resolution came out that 11% of all respndents
thinks „ages restrictions“ is the worst thing about bein a child or young
person living in England. Is that right?

Firstly the aspect of discriminatory. Many people
thinks being age restricted is a form of discriminatory, but on contrary the
people just want to protect the younger people. A human grows by time and are
not adult on one day. For example the age restrictions of alcohol is a good
measure to protect young people of killing her self by drinking alcohol. Next
young people says that they have less liberties with the age restrictions. It
is clear that with a restriction comes a limited libertie but i think about the
reason why a low is in force. If we have not rules in our world, the world will
destroy her self. Again the example with the alcohl. Yes, it is right that u
cant drink alcohol since u are not 16 years old, but is imagine everybody will
drink alcohol at the ages of 12 years and maybe younger? The world will not be
the same like at the moment, it is a general rule to hold the world together.
Finally the aspect with not be flexible enough. 
As a young people u have so many possibilities to devolope yourself. You
can learn what ever you want and have almost every possibility in your live. A
polictical boundarie for example is not a flexible restrictions. It gives you
time to think about few things before you make a desicion. It is clear that few
children or/and youthful are mature enough based on his or her ages but in my
opinion there must a political restrictions for general. Normaly a 12 years old
boy cannot have a political understanding.

In my opinion ages restrictions belongs to live. As i
mention in the ages of for example 16 i have so less pressure in my live. I
have not to deal with healtcare, educations, jobs and worries. In other words i
was more free. Nowadays i have so many things to do and think of. On the other
hand im glad about to have the possibilities to vote. Politic is a important
aspect in our world. I must admit that i want to vote at the ages of 16 but i
must admit too that i was not measure enough for understand the theory. In
other words the age restriction help me to get a better understánding of the
matter. In conclusion the restriction gives us a solid structure in our live.
Without rules, restrictions or something else we cant live like now. Above all
think about following situation: The age of found a company is 16. Now all or
at least a few people with not so much experience found a company and after a
while the companies go broken. Without the rules many people should destroy her
or his live. In my opinion it is not a restriction, it is a help to  not fall on the nose.

All in all you can say that restrictions, especially age restrictions or
rules are a important directive of our live.

Antwort
von ChickPea, 10

Wenn du den text hier reinkopierst ist es einfacher fuer "uns" den zu korrigieren.

Das sind 'ne Menge Fehler drin.

Kommentar von Biophyte ,

Nowadays it is very important to know what young
people thinks about being a child or a young person and in that case a survey
was created in England. As a resolution came out that 11% of all respndents
thinks „ages restrictions“ is the worst thing about bein a child or young
person living in England. Is that right?

Firstly the aspect of discriminatory. Many people
thinks being age restricted is a form of discriminatory, but on contrary the
people just want to protect the younger people. A human grows by time and are
not adult on one day. For example the age restrictions of alcohol is a good
measure to protect young people of killing her self by drinking alcohol. Next
young people says that they have less liberties with the age restrictions. It
is clear that with a restriction comes a limited libertie but i think about the
reason why a low is in force. If we have not rules in our world, the world will
destroy her self. Again the example with the alcohl. Yes, it is right that u
cant drink alcohol since u are not 16 years old, but is imagine everybody will
drink alcohol at the ages of 12 years and maybe younger? The world will not be
the same like at the moment, it is a general rule to hold the world together.
Finally the aspect with not be flexible enough. 
As a young people u have so many possibilities to devolope yourself. You
can learn what ever you want and have almost every possibility in your live. A
polictical boundarie for example is not a flexible restrictions. It gives you
time to think about few things before you make a desicion. It is clear that few
children or/and youthful are mature enough based on his or her ages but in my
opinion there must a political restrictions for general. Normaly a 12 years old
boy cannot have a political understanding.

In my opinion ages restrictions belongs to live. As i
mention in the ages of for example 16 i have so less pressure in my live. I
have not to deal with healtcare, educations, jobs and worries. In other words i
was more free. Nowadays i have so many things to do and think of. On the other
hand im glad about to have the possibilities to vote. Politic is a important
aspect in our world. I must admit that i want to vote at the ages of 16 but i
must admit too that i was not measure enough for understand the theory. In
other words the age restriction help me to get a better understánding of the
matter. In conclusion the restriction gives us a solid structure in our live.
Without rules, restrictions or something else we cant live like now. Above all
think about following situation: The age of found a company is 16. Now all or
at least a few people with not so much experience found a company and after a
while the companies go broken. Without the rules many people should destroy her
or his live. In my opinion it is not a restriction, it is a help to  not fall on the nose.

All in all you can say that restrictions, especially age restrictions or
rules are a important directive of our live.

Antwort
von ReTrig, 12

Warum schreibst du immer "many people thinks" many people think ist doch richtig oder

Kommentar von kirstenhaus16 ,

genau, sind aber nicht die einzigen Fehler

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