Frage von donatesenlecker, 52

Ist dieser englische Text über Environment so in Ordnung, oder habt ihr Verbesserungsvorschläge?

The article ''''' written by Environment Bureau published by freeway in the Uk in 2011 deals with the ecogical damage which is human induced and also how we could counteractes our bad influence into Environment by living ecofriendly ,the author list some Suggestion how we can solve the Problem .At the beginning the authour states that much more People are concerned about the Environment because they finally realize that they are affecting the Environment on a bad way and that we are responsible for any Kind of diffretn Pollution on the Environment .He underlines that the climate Change is a big issues that we have,because our cars and many industry emits gases like Carbon dioxide into the atmosphere ,therefore it is develops climate Change in Long term ,In the next part the authour gives advices how we can solve the Problem by Actions like Recycling trash or instead of driving we could go for a walk . The Environment Bureau put measures to counteracted the bad influence humans have on the ecosystem it is important that the People should at first face the Problem by giving Information how to live eco friendliy.

Antwort
von AstridDerPu, 21

The article ''''' written by (Hier fehlt der bestimmte Artikel.) Environment Bureau published by freeway (RS) in the Uk (RS) in 2011 deals with the ecogical (RS) damage which is human induced (Formulierung; verwende nur das Adjektiv.) and also how we could counteractes (RS) our bad influence into (Präposition) Environment (RS) by living ecofriendly (Wortart)

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the author list (Grammatik) some Suggestion (RS; Grammatik) how we can solve the Problem (RS). At (Präposition) the beginning (Komma) the authour states that much (Grammatik) more People (RS) are concerned about the Environment (RS) because they finally (Wort) realize that they are affecting the Environment (RS) on (Präposition) a bad way and that we are responsible for any Kind (RS) of diffretn (RS; Ausdruck) Pollution (RS) on (Präposition) the Environment (RS).He underlines that the climate Change (RS) is a big issues (Subjekt-Verb-Bezug) that (Pronomen, Wiederholung) we have (Komma) because our cars
and many industry emits (Grammatik) gases like Carbon (RS) dioxide into the atmosphere

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therefore it is develops (Grammatik) climate Change (RS) (Formulierung) in (Hier fehlt der bestimmte Artikel.) Long (RS) term (Punkt)

In the next part (Wort) the authour (RS) gives advices (Grammatik) how we can solve the Problem (RS) by Actions (RS) like Recycling (RS) trash or instead of driving we could go for a walk. (Formulierung) The Environment Bureau put (Wort, Grammatik) measures to counteracted (Grammatik) the bad influence humans
have on the ecosystem

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it is important that (---) People (RS) (---) first face the Problem (RS) by giving Information(RS) how to live eco friendliy (RS; Wortart). (Formulierung, Satzstellung)

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

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AstridDerPu

Kommentar von donatesenlecker ,

Danke dafür ich habe dazu die online seite dicct benutzt dachte die wäre gut naja was meinst du mit Rs groß klein schreibung wie soll ich das mit der satzstellungen machen zb mit dem instead of driving we should go for a walk or we should try to drive less and walk more 

Kommentar von donatesenlecker ,

Ist mein text ne große katastfophe 0.0 was meinst du mit präpositionen statt  bad influenced into environment at oder on the environment

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Kommentar von donatesenlecker ,

Which is caused by humans statt is human induced

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