Frage von MiakaChan, 48

Text über einen Eiskunstlaufwettkampf in Englisch (Korrekturleser gesucht!)?

Hallo zu später Stunde ^^ habe grade für Englisch einen Text schreiben müssen, wäre toll wenn den jemand zur Korrektur mal lesen könnte ^^ Danke im Voraus und LG, Miaka :)

Hier der Text:

Last Saturday, 27th Feburary was a figure- skating competition in the ice- skating hall in Erfurt. It starts at 9.30 am and the end was 2.45 pm. The participants came from all over the world. The female participants were Midori Itō and Chieri Asuka from Japan, Grace Elizabeth and Carla Gold from United States, Katharina Witt from Germany, Denise Biellmann from Switzerland and Marta Andrade from Spain. The first one wich ran her free skating was Denise Biellman, she was very good, but when she jumped a triple toeloop, she fell, so her score was 5.2. Then ran Grace Elizabeth her free skating, with the score 5.2 too, then Chieri Asuka, with 5.3, Marta Anrade, with the score 4.9, Carla Gold, with 4.8, Katharina Witt the ex- world champion, with 5.8 and last but not least Midori Itō, with the score 5.4, but when she wanted to jump a jump combination she jumped into the cameras! Fortunately she hasn't violated. The female winner was Katharina Witt. The male figure skater was very good too, the male winner was Horst Faber with the score 5.2. The competition was very great and at end the figure skater gave autographs.

Expertenantwort
von AstridDerPu, Community-Experte für Englisch, 25


Last Saturday, 27th Feburary (Hier fehlt etwas.) was a figure- skating competition in the ice- skating hall in Erfurt. It starts (Zeit) at 9.30 am and the end was
(Hier fehlt eine Präposition.) 2.45 pm. The participants came from all over the world. The female participants were Midori Itō and Chieri Asuka from Japan, Grace
Elizabeth and Carla Gold from (Hier fehlt der bestimmte Artikel.) United States, Katharina Witt from Germany, Denise Biellmann from Switzerland and Marta Andrade from Spain.
The first one wich (Pronomen) ran her free skating (Wendung) was Denise Biellman (neuer Satz), she was very good, but when she jumped a triple toeloop, she fell, so her score was 5.2. Then ran Grace Elizabeth her free skating
(s.o.; Satzstellung, kein Komma) with the score 5.2
too, then Chieri Asuka, with 5.3, Marta Anrade, with the score 4.9,
Carla Gold, with 4.8, Katharina Witt the ex- world champion, with 5.8
(s.o.; kein Komma vor with; Wiederholung)


(neuer Satz)

and last but not least Midori Itō, with the score 5.4, but when she
wanted to jump a (---) combination (Komma) she jumped into the cameras!
Fortunately (Komma) she hasn't violated (Zeit, Verb). The female winner was Katharina Witt.

The male figure skater (Plural) was very good too, the male winner was Horst
Faber with the score 5.2.

(Das kommt ziemlich abrupt. Wer waren die anderen Teilnehmer bei den Männern?)


The competition was very great and at (Präposition) end the
figure skater (Plural) gave autographs.


Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.



Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,



für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!



:-) AstridDerPu






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