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Today all over the world computers take part (Wort) in our life. (Satzstellung) They are almost in all (Ich würde hier - auch um die Wiederholung - zu vermeiden "every" vorziehen.) houses, offices, schools and other places and they help us in all different situations. But will the intelligent machines (Hier fehlt ein Verb.) more
clever than we in the future? My opinion is that computers will probably
be more intelligent in some matters, but never in certainly (Wortart) issues.

The advantages (Wort; kein Komma) why the electronic machines will be more clever (kein Komma) are that they are a way (Stil) faster, more accurate and they got (Grammatik) a better and bigger memory than we humans will ever have. Thus computers are able to work harder and faster as (Wort) a human brain and are more helpfully (Wortart) in some matters than oneself (Wort) . For example a calculator, you can calculate difficult results very quickly and with no big efforts (kein vollständiger Satz) or you can save large documents (mit einem Taschenrechner?), actually some things in which humans aren´t able in (Präposition) (Das ergibt keinen Sinn.) .

On the other hand, there are some other issues in which the electronic
machines will never be more intelligent than we, namely to show or to
realise
(Grammatik) emotions. Because they are machines made off (Wort) metal, which will never have brains  (Grammatik) like (Wort) we have (Wort; Grammatik). For instance (Komma) computers will never feel anything or understand when you feel sad or angry, they aren’t able to be happy, nervous or bad, like (Wort) we humans.

In conclusion, there are many different issues in which computer (Grammatik) will
be more intelligent than humans, which will also help us a lot. Anyway (Komma)
they will never have this important achievement which we are able in (Präposition) (Grammatik; Formulierung), to feel, to have different emotions and to have this humanity. (Grammatik; Formulierung, Ausdruck; in 2 Sätze teilen.) 

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!

:-) AstridDerPu

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