Laura, by Robert O'Neill, Einleitung Tipps?
Kann jemand vielleicht diese Art .. Einleitung, einfach rein nach Fehlern, grammatikalisch und Rechtschreibung korrigieren, beziehungsweise TIpps geben, ect?
Das hier ist meine Einleitung zu folgender Kurzgeschichte: Everybody in the crowded restaurant stared when the young woman suddenly threw a glass of wine in the face of the older man sitting opposite her at a table near the window. The young woman was attractive and well dressed. The man was at least twenty years older than she was. He looked shocked. The young woman suddenly stood up and ran towards the door. ”Laura, come back, please,” the older man shouted. But she had already reached the door. The man ran after her. It had started to rain outside. She ran out into the middle of the street. ”For God's sake, give me a chance to explain,” the man shouted. She turned around and stared at him. A car had just turned the corner and was coming towards her very fast. The driver had not turned his windscreen wipers on, and he was talking to someone on his 10 mobile. Then - suddenly - he saw her -directly in front of him, so close that he could see her eyes when she turned her head and looked at him.
Einfach weil ich muss - Muss das hier was ich geschrieben habe einfach im present sein.
The author Robert O’Neill gives us a short story named “Laura”, in our hands without an detailed beginning and an conclusive ending. We just can follow the situation – Laura is sitting in a restaurant with a man, but it seems that he have done something wrong so that whe throws a glas of wine into his face and runs out of the restaurant. The man want to explain, but as she just turns around and stare at him, a driver turns into the street where Laura is standing. At the End we are’nt know, what happs to her, because it just ends with the fact that the driver is destract and Laura turns now the head to the driver, during the car is close to the her.
The author Robert O’Neill gives us a short story named “Laura”, in our
hands without an (Grammatik; RS) detailed beginning and an (Grammatik; RS) conclusive ending. We just can follow (Word Order) the situation – Laura is sitting in a restaurant with a man, but it seems that he have (Grammatik done something wrong so that whe (RS) throws a glas (RS)
of wine into his face and runs out of the restaurant. The man want (Grammatik) to explain, but as (Wort) she just turns around and stare (Grammatik) at him, a driver turns into the street where Laura is standing. At (Präposition) the End (RS; Komma) we are’nt (RS) know (Grammatik) (kein Komma) what happs (Wort) to her (kein Komma) because it (Wer oder Was?) just ends with the fact that the driver is destract (Grammatik) and Laura turns now (Word Order; Grammatik) the (Possessive Pronomen) head to the driver (kein Komma) during (Wort) the car is close to (---) her.
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