Frage von lenar1234, 27

Könnte mir diesen Text jemand korrigieren?

TASK: Write an article of 250 words in which you explain why you would or would not like to live in the UK. In your text, • analyze possible advantages and disadvantages of life in the UK • discuss the future of the UK and the EU • suggest one way to make sure young Europeans can still get and stay in touch with young Britons after the Brexit

My Text:

THE UK AS A SAFE AND CLEAN HOME COUNTRY!?

Are you one of those people who would like to live in the UK or would you not want to?

By analysing the advantages and disadvantages of the UK you could see how life is there and discuss if you would like to live in the UK.

Starting with the advantages the great entertainment is a significant aspect. A pro that definitely describes the UK form a good side is the education system. It is one of the best in the world and it is free.

Continuing with the disadvantages the crime in the UK is the first negative aspect that comes to my mind. But wherever you live there will always be crime.
Another reason for not living in the UK is that there is always traffic and pollution there. The pollution promotes health problems like asthma and because of that many people move away.

Now, let met depart the UK and the EU in the following years. Leaving from the EU brings many changes for us. Within the EU, you can travel a lot without problems. But if you are traveling to the UK you will need a visa or something like that in the future. Getting a visa takes much time and money.

At least I want to discuss a point that’s important for especially young people. Many young people in the EU are afraid of losing friendships in the UK because of Brexit. But however, nowadays it’s easy to stay in touch with your friends around the world because of modern social networks such as “Facebook” and “Skype”.

As a plot I can say it’s everyone’s own decision to either live in the UK or not. In the context with Brexit it’s not sure want will happen. We will see and if we want or not we have to live with the changes.

DANKE, im Vorraus! Ich wäre sehr dankbar über jede Hilfe! DANKE! Es reicht natürlich, wenn die groben Fehler korrigiert werden und nicht wundern, Englisch ist nich so meines!

LG

Antwort
von CezaGoesHam, 11

Deine Sätze sind sehr verdeutscht. Achte bitte auf deine Punkt und Komma Setzung.



By analysing the advantages and disadvantages of the daily life in the UK, you can discuss if you rather want to live there (or not/over germany)?.

The United Kingdom has a great education system and is well-known for their impact in the education. Furthermore it's free,

The UK has a high crime rate, at least in central cities, which makes it a negative aspect. But nowadays almost every metropolis has a high crime rate.

Besides the crime, the UK has a high traffic rate and a huge problem with pollution.

"something like that" schreibt man nicht in der Schule, das ist Umgangssprache.

At last und nicht at least 

Die letzten beiden Absätze sind in Ordnung.




Kommentar von lenar1234 ,

DANKE!

Expertenantwort
von AstridDerPu, Community-Experte für Englisch, 8

THE UK AS A SAFE AND CLEAN HOME COUNTRY!?

Are you one of those people who would like to live in the UK or would you not want to?

By analysing the advantages and disadvantages of the UK(Komma) you could see how life is there and discuss if you would like to live in the UK.

Starting with the advantages (Komma)

the great entertainment (die großartige Unterhaltung??) is a significant aspect. A pro that definitely describes the UK form (RS/Wort) a good side is the education system. It is one of the best in the world and it is free.

Continuing with the disadvantages (Komma) (---) crime in the UK is the first
negative aspect that comes to my mind. But wherever you live there will
always be crime.
Another reason for not living in the UK is that there is always traffic and pollution there. (---) pollution promotes (Wort) health problems like asthma and because of that many people move away.

Now, let met (Wort) depart (Wort) the UK and the EU in the following years.

Leaving (---) the EU brings (Wer verlässt die EU? Meinst du den Brexit?) many changes for us. Within the EU, you can travel a lot without problems. But if you are traveling (Grammatik) to the UK you will need a
visa or something like that in the future. Getting a visa takes much
time and money.

At least (Wendung; Komma) I want to (besser: would like to) discuss a point that’s important for especially (Position) young people. Many young people in the EU are afraid of losing friendships in the UK because of Brexit. But however (Wendung), nowadays it’s easy to stay in touch with your friends around the world because of modern social networks such as “Facebook” and “Skype”.

As a plot (???; Komma) I can say it’s everyone’s own decision to either live in the UK or not. In the context with (Wendung; Präposition) Brexit it’s not sure want (RS/Wort) will happen. We will see and if we want or not (Wendung) we have to live with the changes.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts Wichtiges übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!

:-) AstridDerPu

PS: im Voraus

Antwort
von Sisalka, 9

THE UK AS A SAFE AND CLEAN HOME COUNTRY!?
Are you one of those people who would like to live in the UK or would you not want to?
By analysing the advantages and disadvantages of the UK you could see how life is there and discuss if you would like to live in the UK. Lass das weg, ist nur Füller.
Starting with the advantages, the great entertainment is a significant aspect.  Welche Art Unterhaltung meinst du? A pro that definitely describes the UK positively is the education system. It is one of the best in the world and it is free. Woher nimmst du das? Wieso ist es besser als D oder andere Länder, wo es doch auch umsonst ist?
Continuing with the disadvantages the crime in the UK is the first negative aspect that comes to my mind. But wherever you live there will always be crime.
Another reason for not living in the UK is that there is always traffic and pollution there. The pollution promotes health problems like asthma and because of that many people move away.

Auch diese beiden Punkte sind Allgemeinplätze, die überall gelten und nicht wirklich etwas mit UK zu tun haben. Überleg dir lieber zwei oder drei Punkte, die für UK gelten und nirgends sonst, oder zumindest dort besonders gelten.


Now, let met depart the UK and the EU in the following years. Dieser Satz ist Quatsch. Meinst du vielleicht: Now let us look at the difference the UK's exit from the Eu might make.

Leaving the EU brings many changes for us. Within the EU, you can travel a lot without problems. But if you are traveling to the UK you will need a visa or something like that in the future. Getting a visa takes much time and money. Blödsinn, du kannst genauso weiter mit einem Person reisen. Was sich ändert sind die Bedingungen für Menschen, die dort arbeiten wollen.

At least I want to discuss a point that’s important for especially young people. Many young people in the EU are afraid of losing friendships in the UK because of Brexit. But however, nowadays it’s easy to stay in touch with your friends around the world because of modern social networks such as “Facebook” and “Skype”.

Auch das hat nicht wirklich viel mit Brexit oder UK zu tun. Du skypst doch auch wenn jemand in Berlin und München wohnt.... Und ist das wirklich die Sorge junger Leute? Ich hab davon nix gesehen, während sie über Brexit diskutiert haben.


As a plot I can say it’s everyone’s own decision  den Teil versteh ich nicht, was willst du damit sagen.

to either live in the UK or not. In the context of nicht with Brexit it’s not sure what not want will happen. We will see and weather and not if we want or not we have to live with the changes.

Überleg noch mal, was eigentlich dein Argument dafür und dagegen ist. Das ist noch ein bisschen dünn.

Kommentar von Sisalka ,

Ach ja, die Überschrift: The UK - a safe and clean country to make your home in?

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