Frage von skatergirlyolo, 70

Kann mir jemand diesen englischen Text korrigieren (Geschichte weitergeführt)?

Ich wäre euch sehr dankbar:)

* I didn’t want her to close the door. I wanted to spend more time with her. After the picnic I was even more in love and I couldn’t go sleeping, pretending that everything was okay because it wasn’t. I loved her and I finally had to tell her what I was feeling for her. As the door was almost close I extended my left hand to the door. ‘’Lucy?’’ I asked. ‘’Yeah?’’ She opened the door further so that she stood in the door-frame. She raised her eyebrows and expected me to say something. I opened my mouth but nothing came out. She laughed and said with a big smile ‘’Come on Tom! What’s going on?’’. I cleared my throat. ,,I love you’’ I said quietly. As she still looked at me with a question mark above her head, I repeated my sentence louder ‘’I love you’’. ‘’Oh Tom I love you as well!’’ she answered. ‘’You’re my best friend and I’m so grateful to you’’ Oh no. She misunderstood my intention. I really loved her. Not as a friend! But I didn’t want to tell her that anymore. My courage was faded. Therefore I just faked a smile and said ‘’Bye Luce! See you tomorrow!’’. ‘’Bye Tom! Good night. ‘’ Lucy said and closed the door.

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Antwort
von MeRoXas, 26

Die Kommafehler korrigiere ich dir jetzt nicht, aber folgendes kannst du verbessern:

[...] and I couldn't go to sleep[...]

As the door was almost closed[...]

’’I love you’’ (die linken Anführungsstriche waren unten)

[...] and I'm so grateful ('to you' kannst du weglassen)

My courage faded away.

Ansonsten ist der Text ganz gut. Eventuell kannst du ja noch komplexere Sätze durch sentence connectors bilden.

Kommentar von Plotz ,

’’I love you’’ (die linken Anführungsstriche waren unten)

Das wären die einzigen typographisch richtigen gewesen.

Antwort
von Lectra5, 7

I didn’t want her to close the door. I wanted to spend more time with
her. After the picnic I was even more in love and I couldn’t go
to sleep, pretending that everything was okay because it wasn’t. I loved
her and I finally had to tell her what I was feeling for her. As the
door was almost close I extended my left hand to the door. ‘’Lucy?’’ I
asked. ‘’Yeah?’’ She opened the door a bit more so that she stood in the
door-frame. She raised her eyebrows and expected me to say something. I
opened my mouth but nothing came out. She laughed and said with a big
smile ‘’Come on Tom! What’s going on?’’. I cleared my throat. ,,I love
you’’ I said quietly. As she still looked at me with a question mark
above her head, I repeated my sentence louder ‘’I love you’’. ‘’Oh Tom I
love you as well!’’ she answered. ‘’You’re my best friend and I’m so
grateful to you’’ Oh no. She misunderstood my intention. I really loved
her. Not as a friend! But I will no longer mention it. My
courage was faded. Therefore, I just faked a smile and said ‘’Bye Luce!
See you tomorrow!’’. ‘’Bye Tom! Good night. ‘’ Lucy said and closed the
door.

Hoffe das hilft. Nicht viel zu berichtigen, sehr gut!

Antwort
von ChickPea, 10

Das kommt mir sehr bekannt vor. "About Time"  hiess der Film.

(Ab 1:50min ungefaehr)

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