Frage von EricWeinamnn, 35

Hallo, nächste Woche habe ich meine Eurocom Englisch Prüfung. Könnte jemand den Präsentationstext auf Zeiten und Satzbau korrigieren?

Dublin

Now im am going to tell you something about Dublin . First i want to give you some facts about dublin, secoundly I will talk about some sights in dublin. My third point is about the culture.

Facts

Dublin is the capital and also the biggest city of Ireland. It is on the east coast of the island Ireland. The clima in dublin is very interesting i think. They have about 130 days of rain per year. So imagine nearly every 3rd day is a rainy day, and i think thats a bit to much. Dublin is a financial center, there are some european banks like commerzbank or Lbbw. The city is also famous for his guinnes factory, wich is a beer factory who is known all over the world. Just in Dublin are about 666 licenced Pubs so thats a lot, the oldest of them is the ,,brazen head“ its there since 1198. Dublin is the centre of the pharmaceutical industrie and also of the IT sector. There are a lot European headquaters like Google Microsoft Facebook.

Sights

A very known area of Dublin is Temple Bar. There are a lot of famous pubs and also a lot of live music.An interesting sight is the Trinity college, it was established by Elizabeth I in 1592 and you can still study there. A famous place in dublin is the Phoenix park its the largest urban enclosed park in europe and is more than twice the size of New Yorks central park. A very interesting area of dublin for me is the dame street its a main street and you don`t have to walk far till you are at Temple bar
or The Kaplan language school were i selfe went this summer. In this street is the Trinity college and a lot of shops and nice places, but there is a lot of traffic and the people often run.

Cluture

The sport culture of Dublin is special. They do sports, other countries even dont know, they excist. For excample Hurling, its defenetly one of the fastest and most difficult sport in the world. They play it on a field that can be up to 145 meter long and 90 meter wide. The stick is called hurley and looks similar to a hockey racket. They need to shoot the ball who looks like a baseball in a goal. The goal is a mix between a rugby and a normal soccer goal. The rules are to difficult to explain now.

The most popular sport in Ireland is Gaelic football. Its like football but you are allowed to walk through the whole field with the ball in the hand, but in front of the goal you have to kick the ball in.

Maybe you now the most famous feast day in Irland, the St. Patricks Day. It commemorates the Irish bishop Patrick, who lives probably in the 5th century. He is the foremost patron saint of Irland. The St Patrick day is celebrated on the 17th of march with public parades and festivals, its common to wear a green attire and shamrocks. The St Patricks day is also celebrated in many other countries around the world.

Antwort
von Lexy1409, 10

Also ersteimal: der Part mit dem Wetter würde ich als Lehrerin mit einer 5 bewerten. Änder das bitte um. Wieviele Einwohner hat Dublin? Wie groß ist Dublin? Ist es eine hügelige Stadt? Gründung? Usw... Bitte überarbeite dein Referat nochmal, denn ich fürchte, dass du damit sonst keine gute Note bekommst....

Antwort
von FeX95, 35

Lies deinen Text bitte nochmal GENAU druch bevor du ihn hier für solche "Verbesserungsvorschläge", etc. anbietest. Innerhalb der ersten 6 Zeilen sind schon 2 komische Sätze.

The clima in dublin is very interesting i think

WTF? Du möchtest deine Lehrer doch über Dublin aufklären, da darfst du nicht schon direkt am Anfang widersrprüchliche Sätze sprechen. Du glaubst, dass das Klima dort interessant ist. Warum? Sag doch lieber, DASS du das Klima dort sehr interessant findest, WEIL sie eben über 130 Tage Regen haben, etc...das ist, was Irland ausmacht. (Nur als kleines Beispiel, was ich mit "komischen" Sätzen meine)

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