Frage von CookieIsHere, 75

Habe Englisch Text geschrieben und würde bitten ,dass ihn mir jemand verbessert?

                   Being successful at job interviews

In this article , we want to illustrate the relevant information about work and how everybody should prepare for an interview.

Especially young peoples should be well prepared for a job interview. First of all , it is very important to go early to bed so , you are not tired in the morning. And probably the most important advice is don’t be late. This is the worst think that can happen , so make sure you are some minutes earlier at the interview. Better to be early than to late. There are also behaviour rules during the interview. Second of all , the dress code is very important. For boys tank tops or clothing which shows allot of your body is a no go. The same rules for girls it means no short skirts or tops. If you have tattoos or piercings try to hide them because many employer don’t like it. Your fingers should be always clean. Another taboo is to wear hats during the interview so when you come in for the interview take them of . Thinks you should never do in an interview , is to slouch or to sit yourself alone. This is very unrespect full. Thinks you should do at first is to shake hands and to greet your interviewer. Show him good manners and answer only if you are asked. If you are there with your parents , they should wait outside. After the interview say something like “ thanks for the interview “ so he will know you are grateful for the meeting.

All in all , those tips are very important and they helps you to get the job you want. And with every interview you will get better at it.

Bitte verbessern und mir eine Note von 1 - 5 geben wenn es geht :)

Danke im Voraus !

Antwort
von HansH41, 31

Der Inhalt deines Essays ist gut, sogar sehr gut.

Arbeite mal an der sprachlichen Ausführung. Die ist mir zu lang zum korrigieren.

Kommentar von CookieIsHere ,

Denke und mit sprachlicher Ausführung meinst du sicher Grammatik oder ?? 

Kommentar von HansH41 ,

Ja, auch die From, keine Absätze z.B.

Antwort
von BirdoSchnoerdo, 31


In this article we want to illustrate the relevant information about work and how everybody should prepare for an interview.


Especially young people should be well prepared for a job interview.
First of all, it is very important to go early to bed so you are nottired in the morning. And probably the most important advice is not being late. This is the worst thing that can happen, so make sure you are some minutes earlier at the interview. Better to be early than too late.                                                                There are also rules of behaviour during  the interview.                             Second of all, the dress code is very important. For boys tank tops or clothing which exposes a lot of your body are a no-go. The same rules for girls meaning no short skirts or tops. If you have tattoos or piercings try to hide them because many employers don’t like it. Your hands and nails should be always clean. Another taboo is to wear a hat during the interview so when you're entering the interview take it off.                                                              Things you should never do in an interview, is to sit down without being asked or to slouch. This is very unrespectful.                                                                Things you should do at first is to shake hands and to greet your interviewer. Show him good manners and speak only if you are asked. If you arrived with your parents, ask them to wait outside.

After the interview you can say something like “ Thanks for the interview. “                       so  the interviewer will know you are grateful for the meeting.


All in all, these tips are very useful helping getting the job you want.                     And with every interview you will get better at it.


Der Text ist gut geschrieben, sehr flüssig und verständlich.                                            Bei den Benimmregeln hättest du noch Beispiele mitangegeben können, und viele Sätze beginnen mit "Things", die könntest du umstellen oder den Teil mit "Things" weglassen. :)  Sonst ist der Text super!

LG Birdo



Kommentar von CookieIsHere ,

Danke ! 

Kommentar von BirdoSchnoerdo ,

sry für die schlechten Absätze

Kommentar von CookieIsHere ,

kein Problem

Kommentar von DPower16 ,

Da sind immernoch so viele Fehler drin :(
Musst du das abgeben?

Kommentar von CookieIsHere ,

Nein ich übe , weil ich im September Herbstprüfung in Englisch habe.. 

Antwort
von Krotte, 13

...First of all, it is very important that you go to bed early, so you don't be tired in the morning....

Ich würde an mancher Ecke noch ein paar Kommas einfügen, aber sonst gut gelungen.

Kommentar von CookieIsHere ,

Danke  :)

Antwort
von Sciffo, 38

people gibts nur im singular

wieso machst du vor den kommata einen leerschritt?

du meinst sicher thinG und nicht thinK

ehrlich gesagt sind da zuviele fehler drinne, als dass ich jeden korrigiere.. das ist sicher deine aufgabe. also setz dich hin und schau dir das ganze nochmal an.

Kommentar von CookieIsHere ,

ok danke 

Kommentar von Lilalaunebaer69 ,

Ich kann nur zustimmen, Satzbau und Grammatik sind oft fehlerhaft.

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