Frage von CookieIsHere, 40

Hab wieder Englisch Text geschrieben hoffe ihr könnt ihn mir verbessern?

protect our enviroment

Do you share the view that one individual cannot do anything to effectively protect the environment?

Protecting your planet is very important because it’s the only place in the universe where we are able to live. It will probably take some view years to live on other planets so , protecting your environment seems more important. But how can we make the first steep to protect our world ? Starting by simple thinks like recycle the trash. It is highly , improbable that no more cars are allowed. The remains of plastic can be found 100 of years later so recycling it into another stuff will help. Drinking water from the faucet is a lot better because there is no need to buy water in bottles . In most country’s the water is healthy and taste like the liquid from the bottle. Donate clothes you don’t need anymore , instead of throwing them away. This also safes a lot of energy to product it and you help your fellow man. A another and very simple option is to turn the light off when leaving the house or even the room. Those minutes safes energy and your bill will look better at the end of the month. The same rules are for stand bye devices , turn it off and you safe a lot.

In the end can be said that there are many ways to protect our planet, we just have to do it.

Würde es nett finden wenn mir das jemand richtig verbessern könnte Danke!!!

Expertenantwort
von adabei, Community-Experte für Englisch, 20

Wenn der kleine Aufsatz gut werden sollte, dann müsste man ihn total umschreiben und ihn logischer aufbauen. Das werde ich allerdings nicht tun. Ich verbessere dir mal nur ein paar deiner schlimmsten sprachlichen Fehler.

Do you share the view that one individual cannot do anything to effectively protect the environment?

Protecting your planet is very important because it’s the only place in the universe where we can live. It will probably still take many years before living on other planets could become possible. This will not happen in our lifetime. This is why protecting your environment seems more important for the moment.
But how can we make the first stepp to protect our world? We could start with simple things like recycling our waste. It is highly improbable that cars will be forbidden in the future. So we won't be able to do a lot here.
The remains of plastic objects will still be found in 100 of years. So recycling them into other things will help. It is a lot better to drink water from the faucet because then there is no need to buy water in bottles. In most countries water is healthy and tastes just like the liquid from the bottle.
Another good thing is to donate clothes you don’t need anymore instead of throwing them away. This also saves a lot of energy that would be used for producing new clothes and, what is more, you help other human beings. 
Another and very simple option is to turn the light off when leaving the house or even the room. Those minutes save energy and your bill will look better at the end of the month. The same rules go for stand-by devices. Turn them off and you will save a lot of energy.

All in all, it can be said that there are many ways to protect our planet. We just have to do it.

Kommentar von CookieIsHere ,

danke! Werde ihn neu schreiben. 

Kommentar von adabei ,

(Ein bisschen logischer hab ich dir den Text ja an ein paar Stellen schon gemacht.)

Kommentar von Pokentier ,

Frage an adabei: "step" mit Doppel-P war doch sicher nur ein Versehen, oder?

Außerdem würde ich nich "100 of years" schreiben. Sollte das "in hunderten von Jahren" heißen? Wenn ja würde "in hundreds of years" mehr Sinn machen.

Expertenantwort
von AstridDerPu, Community-Experte für Englisch, 11

Protecting your (Pronomen) planet is very important because it’s the only place in the universe where we are able to (Ich bevorzuge hier can.) live. It will probably take some (---) years to (Präposition) live (Formulierung)  on other planets so (kein Komma) protecting your (s.o.) environment seems more important (Formulierung). But how can we make (Wort) the first steep (Wort, RS) to protect our world ?

Starting by simple thinks (RS) like recycle the trash. (kein vollständiger Satz) It is highly (kein Komma) improbable that no more cars are allowed (Grammatik; Wort). The remains of plastic can be found 100 (Grammatik) of years later so recycling it into another (Grammatik) stuff (Stil) will help.
Drinking water from the faucet is a lot (Grammatik) better because there is no need to buy water in bottles (Hier fehlt etwas.).  In most country’s (Grammatik, RS) (---) water is healthy and taste (Grammatik) like the liquid (Formulierung) from the bottle. Donate clothes you don’t need
anymore (kein Komma) instead of throwing them away. This also safes (Grammatik; Wort; RS) a lot of energy to product (Wortart) it and you help your fellow man (Formulierung). (---) another and very simple
option is to turn the light off when leaving the house or even the room.
Those minutes safes (Grammatik; Wort; RS) energy and your bill will look better at the end of the month. The same rules are for (Wort) stand bye (Wort; RS) devices, turn it off and you safe (Grammatik; Wort; RS) a lot.

In the end (Komma; hier fehlt etwas) can be said that there are many ways to protect our planet, we just have to do it.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!

AstridDerPu

Kommentar von CookieIsHere ,

ich danke dir das du mir meine Texte verbesserst ich habe Probleme in englisch und ich wollte fragen irgendwelche Tipps wie ich besser Texte schreiben kann ??

Kommentar von adabei ,

Astrid hat dir den Text noch nicht verbessert. Sie hat dir nur gezeigt, wo die Fehler sind.

Antwort
von noname68, 16

it sounds like manuals for articles from chinese manufacturer, who used translation computer

Kommentar von adabei ,

Nein, Fehler wie "thinks" statt "things" sind keine typischen Fehler für einen Textübersetzer. Diese Fehler hat der Fragesteller schon selber verbrochen. ;-)

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