Englisch Text verbessern Kurzgeschichte?
Ich bräuchte mal eine Korrektur. Der Text soll im Simple Past sein. Sry wenn da schlimme Fehler sind.
He was in love with her for a half year. He admitted, that he has been married for 10 years and does not plan to break up the marriage. She was very shocked. Actually she expected a marriage proposar from him, but instead came his secret. She ran out of the restaurant and took a taxi.
He was her lover for a half year. He admitted, that he has been married for 10 years and doesn't plan on breaking up the marriage. She was very shocked. She actually expected him to make her a marriage proposar, but instead he told her his secret. She ran out of the restaurant and went home by taxi.
Würde ich zumindest so machen.
Dafür dass das im Simple Past sein soll hast du aber schon im 2 Satz present past progressive benutzt.
He was (Grammatik) her lover since (Wort; Grammatik) a half year (Ausdruck). He admitted (kein Komma) that he has been
married (Grammatik) for 10 years and does not plan (Grammatik) to break up the marriage. She was very shocked. Actually (Komma) she expected (Grammatik) a marriage proposar (RS) from him, but instead came his secret (Formulierung, Satzstellung) She ran out of the restaurant and got into a taxi.
Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
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