Frage von Mamamama1999, 12

Englisch Text ok?

Ich soll einen Englisch Text schreiben und wollte fragen, was man noch verbessern könnte

Hey Kate Moss,

My name is Crystal Renn. I have read a sentence you have said a few days ago. You said :„nothing tastes good as skinny feels”. In past I also was a normal skinny model like you. For me there was a very big pressure to stay slim and not to eat delicious groceries like donats or other tasty food. Now I'm a "plus size model" and I'm very happy to be my self. But that just by the way. Actually I wanted to know if your are serious. Do you really like to eat nothing? Or is it your poker face? Before I became a model I needed to promise my mom always to be my self and not to do thinks other people want me to do. Then there came a time I realised that I had broken that promise already a long time ago. So my advice for you is to think about my promise to my mom. Perhaps you can think about what you really like.

All the best
Your workmate

Crystal Renn

Antwort
von Sulka27158, 12

Hey :)
Also erstmal: Guter Gedanken hinter dem Text!
Ich würde vielleicht  *"In the past..."  schreiben.
Und ich mein, es heißt "donuts" und nicht "donats".

Kommentar von Mamamama1999 ,

Ok vielen Danke. Ja mit dem Donut war ich mir nicht so sicher 😃

Antwort
von AstridDerPu, 8

Hey Kate Moss,

My name is Crystal Renn. I have read a sentence (Komma) you have said (Zeit) a few days ago. You said :„ (Zeichensetzung) nothing tastes (Hier fehlt ein Wort.) good as skinny feels”. In past (Komma) I also (Stellung) was a normal skinny model like you. For me (Komma) there was a very big pressure (Ausdruck) to stay slim and not to eat delicious groceries like donats (RS) or other tasty food. Now I'm a "plus size model" and I'm very happy to be my self (Komma). But that just by the way. (Denglisch) Actually (Komma) I wanted to know if your are serious. Do you really like to eat nothing? Or is it your poker face? Before I became a model (Komma) I needed to (Wort) promise my mom always to be my self (RS) and not to do thinks (RS) other people want me to do. Then there came a time (Hier fehlt ein Wort.) I realised that I had broken that promise already a long time ago. So my advice for you is to think about my promise to my mom. Perhaps you can think about what you really like.

All the best

Your workmate

Entweder hinter der Gruß- und der Schlussformel ein Komma oder weder hinter der Gruß- noch der Schlussformel ein Komma.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

:-) AstridDerPu

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