Englisch Hausaufgabe Teenagers on streets

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Teenagers on streets 15-year-olds children will go out between 9pm and 6am. But should they be allowed to be on streets between 9pm and 6am? Some people say that children can go out between 9pm and 6am. They can meet her friends, have more freetime and they can d more with their friends, for example go to the cinema. However, other people disagree. One common reason is because they think the children shout be attacked. Another argument against 15-year-olds children should be on the streets at 9pm and 6am is, that the children could be robbed, or that the children have to little sleep. Or so children could be kidnapped for a man or so. In my opinion, it´s okay when 15-year-olds children go longer out at weekend. But all in all you can say it´s better when children stay at home between 9pm and 6am.

Answer 1

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also ein paar kleine Verbesserungen: 15-year-old children can go out between 9pm and 6am. But should they be allowed to do that? Some people say they should be allowed to go out between 9pm and 6am. That way they can meet friends, have more freetime and they could do fun things with their friends, for example going to the cinema. However, other people disagree with that. A common reason is because they think the children could be attacked. Another argument against 15-year-old children beeing on the street from 9pm to 6am is that they could be robbes or that the children get too little sleep. Or the children could be kidnapped from a man or so. In my oppinion, it's ok for 15-year-old children to go out longer at the weekend. But all in all you can say that it's better if children stay at home from 9pm to 6am.

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Answer 2

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Teenagers on streets

15-year-olds children will (= werden) go out between 9pm and 6am. But should they be allowed to be on streets between 9pm and 6am? Some people (Wer? Ich kenne niemand und das ist gesetzlich auch verboten!) say that children can go out between 9pm and 6am. They can meet her friends, have more freetime and they can d

more with their friends, for example go to the cinema. However, other people disagree. One common reason is because they think (---) children shout be attacked (schreien sein angegriffen?). Another argument against 15-year-olds children should be on the streets at 9pm and 6am iskein Komma that (---) children could be robbed, or that (---) children have to little sleep. Or (kein Satzanfang)

so children could be kidnapped for a man

or so. In my opinion, it´s okay when 15-year-olds children go longer out

at weekend. But all in all Komma you can say it´s better when children stay at home between 9pm and 6am.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

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