Frage von Freddie56, 41

Englisch - anders formulieren?

Ich habe zu viele Wörter, schaffe es aber nicht den Text umzuformulieren, sodass er schöner klingt und kürzer ist, aber das gleiche aussagt

First of all, 89% of all parents think that the internet helps teenagers to get information. 88% believe that the web benefits children staying in touch with friends and family, compared with 62% of all parents who are convinced that their child has less personal contact due to the internet. Roughly two-thirds think it helps their child to become more independent. Moreover, only 5% of all parents aren’t worried about the behaviour on the internet and the vast majority is afraid that the web exposes inappropriate content.

Könntet ihr mir helfen?

DANKE LG

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von emily2001, 7

Hallo,

most parents think that the internet provides useful informations to teenagers and helps most children to keep in touch with their relatives and friends.

On the other hand about sixty per cent of all parents are convinced that their child is more isolated when using the internet. Roughly two-thirds of all parents even think the internet helps their offsprings to become more independent.

Only five per cent of mothers and fathers are not concerned about possible bad behaviour on the internet and most of them fear that the web may provide some inappropriate contents.

Aber.

dein Lehrer wird wohl merken, daß der Text nich von dir ist... und ich bin auch nicht perfekt...

Emmy

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von Sisalka, 25

Almost 90% of all parents believe the internet helps teenagers to find relevant information and helps children to stay in touch with friends and family. More than half of all parents (62%) are convinced that their child has less personal contact due to the internet. Roughly two-thirds think it helps their child to become more independent. On the negative side, 95% of parents are worried about dangers on the internet and the vast majority (x%) is afraid that the web exposes inappropriate content.

Wenn du überall mit Prozentzahlen arbeitest, sollte auch beim letzen Teil die Zahl stehen. Ist zwar nicht bedeutend kürzer, aber hilft vielleicht schon. Sonst müsstest du Inhalt wegkürzen.

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von xNeerual, 11

Irgendwie finde ich der Text klingt so manchmal ein bisschen unnatürlich, hab einfach mal meine eigene Version verfasst:

First of all, 89% of all parents think the internet is useful for teenagers to get information while 88% believe that the web helps their children to stay in touch with friends and family. In contrary to that, 62% of all parents are convinced that their children have less personal contact due to the internet and roughly two-thirds of them think it helps their child to become more independent. Moreover, only 5% of all parents do not worry about the (their anstatt the?) behaviour on the internet. Nevertheless, the vast majority is afraid that the web exposes their children to inappropriate content.

Vielleicht hilft dir das ja.

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von ascivit, 12

There is not much to reduce.

My trial:

Asked about benefits of the internet for their teenager child, 89% of all parents believe that it provides information, 88% that children benefit by staying in touch with friends and family, and 66% (?) think it helps them to become more independent. However, 62% are convinced that their child has less personal contact.  Moreover, only 5% aren’t worried about the behaviour on the internet and the vast majority is afraid that the web exposes inappropriate content.

Kommentar von emily2001 ,

Ganz gut!

Kommentar von ascivit ,

danke!

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von cmler, 8

89% der Eltern denken das, dass Internet informativ ist und helfen kann Inhalte zuvermitteln. 88%  (der Eltern?) sind sich sicher das die Komunikation zwischen Personen (Kindern) und anderen (Freunde), erheblich vereinfacht wird. Auf der anderen sind 62% der Eltern überzeugt, das ihre Kinder, durch das Internet (Sozial-media), weniger direkte Kontakte zu gleich altrigen pflegen! Der Umgangston, und das allgemeine Verhalten  im Internet beunruhigt nur 5 %.

  

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