Frage von Carmen28031997, 20

Bitte um Verbesserung meines Motivationsschreiben?

Hallo,

ich möchte mich für eine Studienfahrt nach China bewerben. Sitze jetzt schon das ganze Wochenende davor und habe es endlich fertig. Wär super wenn mir jemand alle meine Fehler sagen könnte und ob ich es überhaupt vom Sinn her so abgeben kann.

Letter of Motivation

Dear Sir or Madam

I very greatful for the offer a study journey to Hongkong.

I am interested in the cultural composition of Asia. Hongkong known as the „Gateway to Asia“, plays a decisive role at the world´s national economy. It would be a pleasure to study within such a dynamic atmosphere.

The study journey to China wold be to travel between the words broaden my Horizon. China impresses me with the deeply rooted culture and life-style wich differs German from us very much.

I would be glad to the new friendsfrom China to be allowed to give an understanding of our life here in...

Hongkong is a great opportunity for me t improve my academic knowledge as well as my language skills.

I am looking forward to hearing from you and I would be pleased if you supported my plans.

Antwort
von 10strawberries, 5

Dear Sir or Madam

I am very grateful for the offer to study in Hong Kong.

I am interested in the cultural aspects of Asia. Hong Kong is known
as the "Gateway to Asia", and plays a decisive role in the world's national
economy. It would be a pleasure to study in such a dynamic
atmosphere.

The study journey to China wold be to travel between the words
broaden my Horizon (I am not sure what this means - ich verstehe nicht diesen Satz).
China impresses me because of its deeply rooted culture
and lifestyle, which differ greatly from the German way of life.

I would be glad to make new friends from China, and be given the opportunity to share differences between our cultures.

A trip such as this to Hong Kong, would be a great opportunity for me to improve my academic knowledge, as well as my language skills.

I am looking forward to hearing from you and I would be pleased if you supported my plans.

Antwort
von Saisonarbeiter3, 15

hm.. eine rechtschreibkorrektur müsstest du selbst durchführen können.

ansonsten hapert es u.a. bei den präpositionen bei dir.

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