Aufsatz über mich-Englisch ;-)

Ich möchte gerne in england ein Internat besuchen. Virraussetztungen dafür ist aber ein selbstgeschriebener Aufsatz über mich - auf englisch! BITTE BERRICHTIGEN& ERGÄNZEN!!!!!!!!!!!! Mein Text: This Letter Should give you an insight in my life & personality: First I want to introduce myself: My name is....I live in a small town near....,called...with my parents & my sister...(4) & my brother...(12). My father works as.......my family is very important for me& we have a really good relationship. Other important persons in my life, are my friends. I spend all my free time with them. Except; i am doing other hobbies: I like to play tennis & sometimes the piano.therefore, i would be happy, if I could continue my hobbies in England. I often have heard,that in English schools, there are Orchestras and other musical and sporting activities.if that should not be so, it would not be that bad, because I have more positiv reasons to vistit an English school: I would like to learn English very well, I would like to make new contacts & think, I will gain very funny experience l. And, of coarse,because my annoying sisters!:-) at the moment I go to the......school. After the holidays, I will visit grade 9. But maybe, I will be in an Englisch school. In Grade 7 I chose French as my second language.

3 Antworten

Freak83

31.07.2012, 19:28

Du setzt viele Kommata. Da kannst du locker die Hälfte streichen. Und nach einem Punkt wird groß geschrieben. Sonst nicht (letter, should - außer I und Namen und sowas natürlich).

Tatsächlich finde ich es ganz gut, wenn du den Aufsatz alleine machst und ich finde es auch nicht schlimm, dass da kleine Fehler drin sind. Macht es authentisch. :) Dann glaubt man dir, dass du den Text geschrieben hast und nicht jemand anders. Of course ;)

Vielleicht könntest du mehr ausführen, warum du ein englisches Internat besuchen willst. Kultur, fremdes Land, Selbstständigkeit etc.

Viel Erfolg

cmsb1901

Fragesteller

31.07.2012, 19:37

Thanks :-))

cmsb1901

Fragesteller

31.07.2012, 23:49

Sorry? Ich soll in dem Aufsatz Erwartungen schreiben..was ist damit gemeint ( beispiele? ) bitte! Danke :-)

AstridDerPu

Von gutefrage auf Grund seines Wissens auf einem Fachgebiet ausgezeichneter Nutzer

Englisch, Text

31.07.2012, 20:16

This Letter Should give you an insight in my life & personality: First I want to introduce myself: My name is....I live in a small town near....,called...with my parents & my sister...(4) & my brother...(12) - Word Order. My father works as a.......

my family is very important for me & we have a really good relationship. Other important persons in my life, are my friends. I spend all my free time with them.**

Except; i am doing other hobbies: I like to play tennis & sometimes the piano. therefore, i would be happy, if I could continue my hobbies in England. I often have heard, that in English schools, there are Orchestras and other musical and sporting activities. - Word Order

if that should not be so - Stil, it would not be that bad, because I have more positiv reasons to vistit an English school: - Stil I would like to learn English very well, I would like to make new contacts & think, I will gain very funny experience

l. And, of coarse, because my annoying sisters! :-)

at the moment, I go to the......school. After the holidays, I will visit grade 9. But maybe, I will be in an Englisch school. In Grade 7 I chose French as my second language.

Groß- und Kleinschreibung
Kommasetzung
Satzstellung (Word Order)
Stil
Wortwahl
für & solltest du and schreiben

Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

:-) AstridDerPu

Schuhsohle

01.08.2012, 13:49

Auch wenn ich Frank83 zustimme, möglichst authentisch und mit eigenen Worten zu schreiben, würde ich jedoch ein paar Fehler korrigieren wollen.

Bitte "I" immer groß schreiben.

Satzstellung: "With my parents an my sister/brother I live in... Präposition: My family is very important TO me! Im Satz: Other important persons..., kein Komma. Except weglassen. Besser einfach schreiben: My hobbies are playing tennis and ... Artikel THE weglassen bei: I go to ... school. Mit einem Namen, den du sicherlich einsetzen wolltest, kann man im Ausland nichts anfangen. Besser: At the moment I go to/visit a comprehension school (Gesamtschule) oder secondary modern (BE)/Junior High (AE) (Realschule) oder grammar school (Gym) in.... After the summer holidays (Aug/Sept?) I will be in grade 9. AT (nicht IN) an English school, however, I might have to attend class 7.

I often have heard - nicht gut. Besser: "I often was told..." (Im Englischen wird das Passiv wesentlich häufiger benutzt, als im D.)

Und nur "If not...", nicht "If that should not be so...". das ist "Deutsch".

Funny experiences? Mhm... Begründung: I would like to improve my English, find new friends and learn a lot about the country and its people.

As A (!) second foreign language I would like to take French. (MY language ist falsch.)

Hoffe, ich konnte dir helfen.

Viel Erfolg!

LG Schuhsohle

Hallo ist der Satz

"Knowing your work, I am very happy that we will have the opportunity to discuss the essay"

"I won't be available on the week of 9th June, and I assume that you will be in Los Angeles the week after that, I would like to ask you If we could have the meeting End of June"

Das soll eine Geschäftsemail werden, aber ich finde es nicht so schön. Ist es grammatikalisch richtig und könnt ihr mir eine schönere Formulierung empfehlen?

...zur Frage

Würde das so passen über New York?Ich muss auf Englisch mein Traumurlaub beschreiben?

I would tell you about my dream vacation. I would spend my dream vacation in New York because I think New York is a great city. My dream vacation is with my best friends. Because it wouldn't be fun alone. First we would fly to New York. We would shop in New York and then go on a tour of New York. After a few days we would take the ship to the Caribbean. There we would bathe a lot in the blue water and sunbathe under the palm trees. Later we would go to the Empire State Building. The Empire State Building is very high and even more so in the evening how beautiful everything lights up. I would also like to go to Central Park and Pikniken to enjoy the beautiful weather, just have a lot of fun playing with friends. I would also be very interested in Brooklyn Bridge and would also like to go there just great that the 19th century still exists.

...zur Frage

Gastfamilienbrief?

Hallo,

ich wollte fragen ob ihr meinen Gastfamilienbrief zur Kontrolle lesen könntet. Meine Familie kann das nicht da sie kaum englisch sprechen.

Dear host family,

First of all I want to thank you for reading my letter and giving me the opportunity to live a year in the USA. To make your decision easier I want to give you a little impression about who I am.

My name is (xxx), I'm sixteen years old and I live in Germany.

My family that means my mom, my dad, my sister, our dog and our cat are an important point in my life and i spend a lot of time with them.

In my freetime I like to cook and bake. I do cardio and weight training reguarly.Next to sports I'm interested in photography, reading books, singing and writing my own songs, travel to different countries, eating my cakes and like every normal teenager meeting my friends. But sometimes I like to just relax and take a nap.

I am looking forward to my first American school day. Here in Germany the school is a little bit different than in the USA. In Germany there aren’t usually sport clubs after school. I especially like schools in the USA because they often offer a bunch of after school activities like cheerleading, which I really want to try, or other clubs.

Right now I’m in the 11th grade. My favorite subjects are English, representative play and art, but I’m not in an art class.

I like to try new things, find out about different cultures, people and languages. I think that living in the USA will be an awesome experience for me and that it will have a big influence on my life and personality. I hope that after the time in your family, the US will be a second home to me. I'm happy that I’ll soon get the chance to get to know the country and the American way of life.

Thank you for reading this letter. I hope you’re going to be my host family and if so, thank you very much!

dankeschön!

...zur Frage

Brief an die Zukünftige Gastfamilie - Gut so?

Dear host family. First of all I want to thank you very much for giving me the chance to life in the US for ten months and that I can be a part of your family. My name is xxx but everyone just calls me xxx. I live with my mum xxx, my dad xxx and my brother xxx in a little city called xxx in the middle of Germany. We live here in a little house with a very nice garden. My brother is three years older than me and starts to study business management in summer. We have a really good relationship. He already has his drivers license so we often just drive around with his car, listen to music, laughing and singing loud. My mum is xx years old and works xxxxxxx. I often go shopping with her and can tell her everything. My dad is xx years old and xxxxxxxx. I spend much time with my family. We love to do sports or to travel. We often go on trips to other cities or to other countries. Two years ago we were on vacation in Florida. I enjoyed it very much. Since then I would like to go to America again, would like to live there and would like to go to school there.

My school is a Gymnasium and I go there every day by foot. That’s why I wake up every single day at 6 a.m. but I am a morning person so I don’t have problems with that. My favorite subjects in school are English, Math and of course Sports. I also learn Spanish which I enjoy too, even if it’s sometimes very hard. Twice a week I go to a school for disabled children and play with them in my free time. The kids love me and I love them. When I am older I would like to be a teacher for kids like these. I also help younger children from my school in especially math. In my free time I often meet my friends or do sports. I used to do gymnastics for eleven years and I am quite good at it. Now I visit the gym twice to four times a week. If there is enough snow in winter I go skiing almost every weekend. In summer I go swimming like every single day with my friends. When I was younger I used to be in the swimming club and I was really good for my age. I also like cycling, skating and ice-skating. But I also love to go shopping or to the cinema like every normal teenager I guess. I would like to spend one year with you because I want to experience by myself how it is to live in another country, go to a high school and speaking another language. Thank you very much for letting my dream come true! I really look forward to meet you See you soon! Love, xxx

...zur Frage

English vorstellen in der schule

Hallo Leute es ist so das wir morgen uns auf english vorstellen müssen und das es mindestens 2min lang sein soll passt dieser Text ? und könnt ihr mir vielleicht tipps geben ? danke eure Caro :)

First of all i don't like to introduce myself. My name is xxxx but my nickname is xxxx. I was born on 4th of december in xxxheim. I live at the moment in xxxstadt. thats only a small village. I attend the Realschule from Ebermannstadt and my favourite subjects are art, mathematics and Reli. I have 2 Brothers and 2 sisters. My Brother and sister attends this school too. My other two siblings are visting the elementary school. I would to like to tell you something about my hobbies and interests. I like sport for example riding my Bike but i hate footballe. In the rest of my free time i'm surfing in the internet. I often meet friends and go shopping.After school i want to study. My mottos are from nothing comes nothing and nothing is to be taken for granted

ich hoffe ihr könnt mir weiter helfen ;)

...zur Frage

Future Plans (English text)

Was kann ich besser machen? Was kann dort noch rein ? Über was kann ich noch erzählen? Sind fehler vorhanden ?

I often think about my future. I´m curious how it will look. At the moment, i go to the ninth class, and write with the secondary modern school qualification. But still a year go on to school. After school im not sure what i should learn then. Car Painter or car-technican. I love cars since i was small. I did a work experience at the car painter, i liked it very well. In the Summerholidays, i want to make a work experience at the car-technican. I want to make money later and want to drive a car.I donｴt know where i will live in the futur. I would like to have a house abroad. Now itｴs just a dream, but maybe one day my dream will come true. I have some plans about my Family. I guess that i will married one day an start a family with 2 kids. But, these are other plans. At the moment, im trying to concentrate on the school. I have also thought about the topic of travel made. I dreamt often on a trip around the world. I would really like to travel to australia, america and england.

...zur Frage

geht dieser text in englisch?

also ich muss ein eigenen text über meinen traumberuf in einer englisch klassenarbeit schreiben natürlich in englisch und weil mein englisch nicht so gut ist würde ich mich freuen wenn sich jmd meinen text anschaut und sagt was falsch bzw wie man es besser schreiben könnte

my dream job is it journalist to will The main reason to why I want to become a journalist is because I think that is something I'm good can. I am really fond of creative writing , and i have also a huge interest in english Literature . Not only that but i also love reading books as well as magazines , and to be someone who writes for a job , i think that would be perfect for me as i would be interested in it and i would be enthusiastic towards my job. i also think that if i make something i like to do a career i will always be happy to wake up in the morning and go to work , and that's what i would like. And the biggest plus point is that the pay of thies job is reasonable which is like the icing on a cake.

danke im vorraus

...zur Frage

Email of Compalint Verbessern bitte?

Heyy ich habe bald English Schularbeit und brauche eure Hilfe und Feedback! Danke im Voraus :) Habt einen schönen Tag! Unten ist die Angabe!

Email of Complaint

From: Lucas_Hannerer@gmail.com

To: Summer_2022@gmail.com

Subject: Feedback on Summer Camp

Dear Sir or Madam,

On 30th July I attended the Summer Camp which is located in Santa Monica. In all honesty, I was very satisfied with this journey. However, there is a reason why I am writing to you. Firstly I have to admit that the meals were significantly amazing. It is remarkable that there is finally no fast food unlike to other summer courses I have been to. Moreover, the Los Angeles sights and surfing at Venice Beach in my free time were very enjoyable.

As far as I could tell, it seems to me that I have learned nothing necessary in courses. Please don`t get me wrong but in my view, there were more leisure activities like sports, parties etc than learning opportunities. I invested all my money and time to learn something new but the quality of the learning strategy was like at the middle school level. I was on Campus not to only have fun but rather zu study.

As you will appreciate, considering the problems I faced during my stay, I would be grateful if you would give me a refund of part of the price back. I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem.

Sincerely

Lucas

...zur Frage

My future plans

Pls könnte sich jemand meinen Text auf Fehler ansehen?

I often think about my future. I am curious how would it look like. At the moment I go to grammar school and I am in the 6th form. So it is obvious that I would like to pass the school leaving examination that I am allowed to go to university. But I am not sure yet what I will study. I was thinking about marketing and management which is something that really interests me, because the idea of presenting and seeling a product sounds good to me. I don’t know where I will live in the future. I would like to have a flat in Vienna on my own. Now it is only a dream but maybe some day. I have also some plans about my family. I supposed that one day I will get married and have children. However, these are further plans. Now I am trying to concentrate on my education and career. But also the fun should not come to short. I was thinking about traveling. I have often dreamed of taking a trip round the world. I have already been to many places. For example I was in Turkey and Italy. I really would like to visit Switzerland, America and England. I haven’t been there yet.

Danke im Voraus!:)

...zur Frage

England austausch Bewerbung gut so?

Hello! My name is *** and I am thirteen years old. Together with my parents and my two years older brother, I live in a house with a big garden. We have got one little dog called ***. My hometown is ***. In my free time I often play football. Meeting friends like *** *** and surfing in the internet are also one of my favorite leisure activities. My favorite subjects are all languages. I am not so happy with subjects concerning to numbers like Maths and Physics. My family and my friends say about me that I am reliable, polite and I have a good behavior. Although I have travelled through many countries, I have never been in England before. For me the exchange would not only mean having fun but the possibility to make acquaintance with a new country and interesting people. I I would be very glad to take part at the exchange with ***(my school)

...zur Frage

Könnte jemand über meinen Essay drüber schauen?

         Every school should demand school uniform

In some countries all over the world school children have to wear uniforms the color scheme and style varies from school to school. In other countries pupils can wear to school what ever clothes they choose. In those countries it could be difficult to introduce school uniforms, because they are not traditionally used to wearing one. In the following essay I want to discuss the advantages to introduce school uniforms world wide.

In my opinion school uniforms ind schools are positive but negative too because not every student have the same style and they cant decide which school uniforms they wanted to wear.

School uniforms are on the one side good because a lot of children are victims of bullying because some of theme haven’t enough money to buy expensive and nice clothes. In this case the school uniform is very practically and maybe a good problem-solving.

On the other side pupils cant find our style and have to wear clothes that they don’t wanted. School uniforms can be nice but not every day ,It quickly becomes boring .However, there are people around the world for which it is too expensive ,always to buy a school uniform. Children grow fast and because of that they have to buy an again and again. We must take into account that the school uniform is maybe expensive but the clothes that the kids need for school is not cheaper and they have to be buy again and again, too.

On the other hand if the pupils wear school uniforms there is not a difference between rich and poor.

I have come to the conclusion that school uniforms are not everywhere positive and children should be able to develop their own style. Cause the bully is not reduced by a school uniform.

...zur Frage

Englisch Text korriegieren

Hallo kann jemand folgenden Text korrigieren? Dankeschön Dear Ben Russell, I read your article “Credit cards to ration individuals' carbon use“, which is published in newspaper The Independent in July19,2006. First of all I want to say that I think it's very good that there are people like you who think about the environment and of course about the problems which are exist. The suggestion is that every body has a credit-card with Carbon Dioxide points and if someone travels, use electricity, gas or petrol with carbon rations they have to pay. There is a special amount of this points and if you need more than your personal cap you have to buy credits on the open market. On the other side if there are people who cut the pollution of the carbon they produce, they could sell their surplus. Mr Miliband also suggests that banning products like light bulbs or electrical appliances which waste power while on standby, have to forbid. Everyone have to make automatic payments of offset pollution. I think this credit cards are not a good idea, because there would be a discrimination, because on the one hand rich people wouldn't cut their consume because they have the money to buy this credits. The most of them wouldn't take care about the environment. On the other hand the poor people have to take care about their carbon use. They haven't got the money to buy new credits. The result would be that the poor people take care and the richer people don't take care. Now you can say that it's maybe not a completely good result but now there are a few people who take care. Better than no one. But what is if the poorer people have to use the car everyday because they have to drive to work. They have to pay that they are working. This wouldn't make work more attractive. The poorer people are disadvantaged. Another cause why this credit cards are not a good idea is that you can't control it. There would be a lot of situations where are disagreements. For example if people drive together to work. Now who have to pay with carbon for that? The driver or the other ones? Another fact is that you can't handle everything with money. Everyone has to pay that the environment become better. But money doesn't help. You can't stop the global warming with money. My idea is that there have to be recompenses for those people who do something against the environment problems. There have to be individual things, which make environment protection very attractive and also necessary. It's very important that everybody knows about the problems and the results if we go on like this. All in all I think it's very good that there are people who think about a solution and things that can be do to stop the global warming. Nevertheless I think the credit-cards and money wouldn't be a good solution

...zur Frage

wer kennt sich von euch in english gut aus .?

Könnt ihr bitte meinen Txt durchlesen und wenn ihr einen Fehler findet es mir sagen. Ich bedanke mich für eure Hilfe und bedanke mich im Voraus

Nowadays there are many discussions about school uniforms. In the following comment I will discuss advantages and disadvantages about school uniforms. The main argument is, that uniforms are good for the school because wearing them stops violence and helps to develope a sense of pride in the students. The contra argument is, that uniforms cost a lot of money and are not always suitable for the weather. These are not the only reasons that students have to worry about. They would need to buy additional clothing to wear after school and that would be really expensive. From my point of view the pro argument is really convincing, because the bullies can´t bully another student, because they wear the same uniforms. Moreover, I think that this is a point which is really important for all of us. Additionally, a powerful argument is that they don´t need to think about how to dress in the morning. It's my opinion that uniforms are helpful because the students respect each other.

...zur Frage

Englisch - Praktikumsbericht - Grammatik :/

Hallo, also ich muss einen Praktikumsbericht in englisch schreiben, da meine grammatik aber...naja... sagen wir mal nicht besonders herausragend ist, hätt ich gern jemanden der sich das mal durchliest und evtl. korrigiert ... dass wär toll :)

(also das ist nür n teil vom bericht)

"A personal evaluation of my work experience All in all i like the work in the Hospital because i like my workmates and the work i have to do. I have learned a lot and fortunately my workmates are kind with taking the time to explain everything to me that I wanted to know. Another Advantage is that I do not have to work on weekends very often and that I have very well ours of labor. What i don't like too much is that i only have one break the whole day and that break it about 8.30 o’clock in the morning so i don't have any time for lunch or any spare time between 9.00-15.40 o’clock. Another disadvantage is that the way from the hospital to my home is very long and because I do not have a car yet it takes me a long time to go there. "

...zur Frage

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