Frage von gizem6972, 35

An ALLE englisch - Speaker , könnt ihr mir den Text verbessern oder sagen wie man es besser formulieren könnte?

Today i will tell you something about the Jose Carreras foundation. The foundation serves to help leukemia ill people. The Leukemia foundation was created due to a spaniard Tenor Jose Carreras, he was ill also on leukemia. By physicians and new findings in the medical succeeded to overcome his illness. From gratitude he founded in 1988 the Foundation for Leukemia and based in Barcelona About 1955, the Leukemia foundation was built in munich and all the foundations share a common goal ’’leukemia can be cured always and at everybody. I find that it is worthwhile to donate tot he Foundation, because we all can not understand how it goes ill children and they could do so with any help is at your disposal. Everyone should appreciate his life as a healthy human being, and also the other people give happiness tob e healthy and happy life build. More than 400 celebrities have supported this Foundation and managed the Foundation even more than 100 Million donations collect.

Expertenantwort
von AstridDerPu, Community-Experte für Englisch, 6

Today i (RS) will tell you something about the Jose Carreras foundation. The foundation serves to help leukemia ill (RS; Wort) people. The Leukemia (RS) foundation  was created due to (Wort) a spaniard (RS) Tenor (RS) Jose Carreras, he was ill also on (Phrase) leukemia (RS). - (Satzbau). By physicians and new findings in the medical (Wort) succeeded to overcome his illness (Der Satz ergibt keinen Sinn). From (Präposition) gratitude he founded in 1988 the Foundation for Leukemia (RS) and based in Barcelona - (Satzstellung; der Satz ist unvollständig)

About 1955, the Leukemia (RS) foundation was built (Wort) in munich (RS) and all the foundations (welche Foundations?) share a common goal ’’leukemia (RS) can be cured always and at (Präposition) everybody.

I find (Wort) that it is worthwhile to donate (Grammatik) to the Foundation (RS; kein Komma) because we all can not (RS) understand how it goes ill children (Das ist Denglish.) and they could do (---) with any help (---)

Everyone should appreciate his (Grammatik) life as a healthy human being, and also the other people give happiness to be healthy and
happy life build (Das ergibt keinen Sinn.)
. More than 400 celebrities have supported this Foundation (RS) and managed (Wort) the Foundation (RS) even more than 100 Million (RS; Tomaten) donations collect (Satzbau; Grammatik).


Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.



Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,



für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!



:-) AstridDerPu



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